kzhang7498
Dec 31, 2016
Undergraduate / High School Fair - Extracurricular Activity Supplement [5]
As the finance coordinator of the Relay for Life Committee in my school, I help organize events to raise money for the American Cancer Society. After my grandfather passed away from cancer, I decided to join RFL in hopes of helping others who are affected by the disease.
During an event (High School Fair), I seized the opportunity that there will be hundreds of parents coming. As parents and their children waited on line for the doors to open and the high school fair to start, the RFL team "walked the line," in which we talked to the parents along the line about our cause and how their donations will have significant impacts on the future of cancer. In that short period of time, we raised hundreds of dollars. In events such as this, I was able to exercise my leadership skills to help the people in my community affected by cancer. Not only did working in RFL serve as a reminder of my grandfather's persistence in fighting the disease, but it was also a socially interactive experience among people who share the ultimate common goal of eliminating cancer. (189 words)
For some colleges the word limit is 150 words, so I need help cutting down words. Any help/feedback is appreciated!
thanks!!
A High School Fair Event
As the finance coordinator of the Relay for Life Committee in my school, I help organize events to raise money for the American Cancer Society. After my grandfather passed away from cancer, I decided to join RFL in hopes of helping others who are affected by the disease.
During an event (High School Fair), I seized the opportunity that there will be hundreds of parents coming. As parents and their children waited on line for the doors to open and the high school fair to start, the RFL team "walked the line," in which we talked to the parents along the line about our cause and how their donations will have significant impacts on the future of cancer. In that short period of time, we raised hundreds of dollars. In events such as this, I was able to exercise my leadership skills to help the people in my community affected by cancer. Not only did working in RFL serve as a reminder of my grandfather's persistence in fighting the disease, but it was also a socially interactive experience among people who share the ultimate common goal of eliminating cancer. (189 words)
For some colleges the word limit is 150 words, so I need help cutting down words. Any help/feedback is appreciated!
thanks!!