wendyli328
Jan 1, 2017
Undergraduate / Rice Personal Perspective Essay- My dad's alcoholism [5]
I agree with Devnater that this essay would benefit if you talk more about how you felt. Right now, only the last paragraph and a little bit of the second last is dedicated to what you learnt. Perhaps add some more in-depth understanding of alcoholism:
IE. alcoholism may not be a choice but is a genetic disorder. So blaming the alcoholic does not help them. Therefore, you learned to be empathetic.
I agree with Devnater that this essay would benefit if you talk more about how you felt. Right now, only the last paragraph and a little bit of the second last is dedicated to what you learnt. Perhaps add some more in-depth understanding of alcoholism:
IE. alcoholism may not be a choice but is a genetic disorder. So blaming the alcoholic does not help them. Therefore, you learned to be empathetic.