Graduate / Nigerian activities and overview. Motivation letter for masters in Telecommunications Engineering [5]

Hello, I have drafted a motivation letter for my masters application to study Telecommunications Engineering. Could you help me review it and make corrections.

the perfect foundation to impact my world

After obtaining a Bachelor's degree in Industrial Physics ( Electronics and I.T Applications ), I was mobilised for a mandatory National Youth Service for a year in which I was posted to one of the states in Nigeria where I served diligently. The experiences I garnered have created a burning desire and passion within me to effect changes in Nigeria and Africa at large.

I joined a christian organisation whose activities included the distribution of relief materials to rural areas. We spent days in these villages eating their food and seeing life from their perspective. We found out that these villages were cut off from electricity supply and had no network coverage. Mobile phones were useless to them. I wondered why the telecommunications industry had neglected such areas but I recalled that energy has been the major challenge amongst several facing the Nigerian telecommunications sector. Most telecoms companies rely on power from the national grid to power their base stations and other I.T equipments but the erratic power supply has made them turn to diesel generators for power which makes operations extremely expensive and unprofitable especially in rural areas.

Nevertheless, these challenges are surmountable and would be overcome with investments into alternative power solutions. The need to find new technologies is exigent as these power challenges in the telecoms sector have created aftershocks in related industries. I was stranded in college on several occasions during weekends because I needed cash but bad network likely caused by power outages had rendered the available ATMs inaccessible. Banking operations have been affected often times as a result of the telecoms power challenges.

Furthermore, while I was in college, about 7 gigabytes of data was allocated to each student but some students would sniff other students' data using malicious softwares and exhaust it before the victims realise the harm done. Where is the Internet security?

Kidnappers are having a field day in Nigeria due to the shortcomings in the telecoms industry. They would kidnap and call for ransom to release their victims using normal sim cards and still not be traced. What happened to the intelligence system, that's if it existed in the first place. If only sim cards were encrypted and had tracking functions enabled, an end to all these would be inevitable.

Last year, I attended a concert and together with some old friends planned a little get together at the concert. On getting there, I tried their mobile numbers severally but got frustrated by repeated dropped calls and poor voice quality when I eventually got a call across to them. They also experienced the same problem and we left the concert without seeing ourselves.

Also, I couldn't get the required GRE preparations because the slow and unreliable network prevented me from attending online GRE prep classes and often times stopped me in the middle of an online test.

Despite the positive trends in digitization and the ubiquitous Internet revolution, it is painful and frustrating to witness the stagnancy in the Nigerian Telecommunications industry. The telecoms industry has been crying for a revolution and I want to be a part of the reformers that will shake off obsoleteness and revitalise the industry. I fear the bleak future of children situated in rural areas in a globalised world converging towards "The Internet of Things". My Bachelor's thesis was on "The implementation of Solar powered I.P camera with automatic power switching system for exam monitoring and surveillance" and it was primarily meant to serve the rural areas to enable national exam conduct and supervision from any part of the country.

I want a Nigeria where I can call my relatives in the village anytime of the day regardless of whether he uses a mobile phone or landline and still get good voice quality. I want to be able to send money to my loved ones using mobile bank transfer without being debited and their accounts not credited. I want a reliable telecoms industry capable of competing with the world powers.

I look forward to undergoing a Masters in Telecommunications Engineering from your prestigious institution and I believe your institution would provide the perfect foundation upon which I would be able to impact my world.