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Posts by Andrea178
Name: Nam Le Hoang
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From: Viet Nam
School: Ho Chi Minh University ň Technology

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Andrea178   
Jan 8, 2017
Writing Feedback / Solutions for traffic jams in Ho Chi Minh City [4]

Tks a lot for your prompt feedback, Holt! This is just an writing assignment in my IELTS class, for the IELTS test on August with the required band score of 6.0. My duty is to write a paragraph discussing the topic. To be honest, your rep is very helpful to me, especially your recommendation of how to empower the essay.

By the way, please help me to check if I made any grammar or collocation mistakes in my above paragraph. Thanks again!!
Andrea178   
Jan 8, 2017
Writing Feedback / Solutions for traffic jams in Ho Chi Minh City [4]

Too many cars in the capitol of Vietnam



In the attempt to cope with traffic jams, developed countries have hitherto conducted a number of effective solutions, and the result of which was an enormous success far beyond the expectations. Therefore, there is no doubt that Ho Chi Minh City government could employ those methods to confront their severe road congestion. To begin with, practical measures should be implemented to raise public awareness about obedience to the traffic laws. In detail, the city had better inflict stricter punishments on drivers breaking rules, including imposing fines on them or sentencing them to do community services. In addition, the appropriate contents could be added into teaching programs of all education levels in order to build up youth's virtue and discipline. The other necessary solution is making the public transport system more convenient for passengers. In particular, the government should primarily enhance the comfort of current bus services by expanding its operating hours, increasing the number of bus routes, and offering a priority lane on streets to dedicated buses. Indeed, to shorten transportation time, it is urgent to speed up implementation progress of metro projects. Apparently, althought solving traffic jams completely is not easy, the government still step by step improve the situation by following the potential solutions mentioned above.
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