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Name: Charlotte Zhao
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charzbk   
Jan 23, 2017
Undergraduate / Describe the factors that have most influenced you and your hopes and dreams. [9]

@skazo @notmargaux @Holt @sweetsenior
Again, thanks a lot guys. I wrote a new one and I really want to hear your opinions on this.

"No. You cannot leave it like that. Go back and finish what you started. Now." I remember making excuses for not going to my music lessons, wanting to quit tennis, and trying to have my mum taking care of my daffodils, that was what she told me every time. Of course, I ended up doing exactly as she ordered each time, however discontented. Though I am thankful that she said those words to me repeatedly, not only because those things which once felt like torture turned out to be my hobbies, but more importantly, I learnt to be consistent, to never quit, to take responsibilities and always finish what I started instead of leaving a mess for others to clean up after me. I did not realize this was a rare quality until later when I found out how many problems it caused when someone in my team did the exact opposite. Since then, never have I ever put others in that position where they are forced to take care of the trouble I made.

Ever since I was a girl, reading has always been one of my greatest pleasure. Waking up every Sunday morning, I would first reach for the book I read myself to sleep the night before. From the earliest civilization to medieval, from the Victorian era to the 20th century then from now to even hundreds of years later, the characters my books depicted live their lives in different times and different countries even different worlds. It was fascinating yet sometimes sad for me to see the effects their times had on them. Still, the last pages of the book A Tale of Two Cities are tear stained. As a child with a rich imagination, I sometimes pictured myself in one of their worlds and occasionally I created my own land to live in. I guess that was when my hope to understand the world better and to make it better began.

To be honest, I was never the most confident kid in school. However I refused to let my shyness stop me. With my parents' encouragement, I ran for head of class in second grade (by being the first one to stand up and making a very short speech on why everyone should vote for me when Mrs. Young asked for nominations), and also have been the host for several school events since fourth grade. Those two activates really boosted my confidence significantly and never was I afraid to speak up.

There is a saying in Chinese translating into "it is the thing that we see and hear the most affects us the most." However, I believe that under the conditions that those things make one think. The thinking is the most crucial part because only when you think about it, it might mean something to you and you could make progress or change for the better.
charzbk   
Jan 15, 2017
Undergraduate / Describe the factors that have most influenced you and your hopes and dreams. [9]

Hi there! I'm applying for the Yale Young Global Scholars programme, and this is the essay I was asked to write.
I have absolutely no experience in writing non-academic essays so I don't know what they're looking for. Since English isn't my first language there might also contain some mistaken use of language. I would really appreciate some feedback. Thank you :)

Please describe the factors that have most influenced you and your hopes and dreams. How have they shaped you?

"to be influenced by what one constantly sees and hears"



In my 17 years of life, I would say that it is the people around me and the voices I have heard influenced me the most.

When I was a kid, I never actually considered my identity. I didn't know who I was nor did I care. I did somehow know who I wanted to be, or to be specific, who I wanted to be like -- my parents, mainly because I did not really know anyone else. Then I really looked up to my elementary school teachers, and started teaching my dolls the things I had learnt from my teachers. Looking back at that time now, I think most of my peers shared this passion of teaching, even though they probably had not been teaching their dolls.

Reading has also been helpful. I was fascinated to see how different people could be from my friends and me through a few pages. Sitting by a pile of books on a Sunday afternoon was so typical for me then. Truth to be told, I was quite a stubborn and single-minded child, however with the accumulating amount of pieces I had read and the voices I had heard, I gradually opened up my mind and tried to embraced the arguments controversial to mine.

When people coming from different backgrounds with different inspirations meet is when the most exchanges of ideas happen and when one can really find out more about himself/herself. Therefore high school has proven to be the perfect classroom for me. I spent the first half of high school in my hometown and will finish the last two years abroad. If the first two years was already socially educating enough (as it was), the first term abroad broadened my horizon even better. Being a boarder allowed me to spend a large proportion of my time with my schoolmates, whereby I got to find more about our cultural differences and begun to form something of a global perspective. Being around them made me think once again about who I was and what I would like to be. Someone was no longer whom I wanted to be like but whom I wanted to be.

There is a saying in Chinese translating into something like "to be influenced by what one constantly sees and hears" and I genuinely believe it. I am still quite like although different from my parents because I did spend the most of my time growing up with them. My classmates were also influential to my personality and I am genuinely thankful since they help me became less strong-headed. I was also able to find out who I had always wanted to be along the way - a thinker, a leader, and a listener. Still stubborn sometimes but have been trying to get better.
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