Grammar, Usage / 'One might wonder what...' Need correction for this essay sentence [5]

@Hoaidepchi
thanks for the reply.
It's that Im narrating someone's description. Its for a college essay and this is how it starts:

Year one: perfect.
Year two: perfect.
Year three: perfect.
Year four: perfect
Overall experience: couldn't be better.

One might wonder what is this description of. I thought the same thing too, when my (relative) described how his experience at (college name) was.

Hope this helps and you can suggest improvement. thanks

Undergraduate / Project with Syrian Kids - critical thinking story / Why LMU? (LMU Supplements) [3]

@sweetsenior
seem quite thorough but I'd say see if you can make them more precise so the reader gets to the point without having to shuffle through all the details