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Name: Yas029
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yass029   
Feb 6, 2017
Scholarship / My future perspective and why I deserve the scholarship [7]

Dear @Ahmed_Sanad @Holt @chizy7

Thank you so much for taking a time and provide me feedback. I have been trying to put the recommendation as necessary and submit the essay.

Once again, Thank youu....
yass029   
Jan 27, 2017
Scholarship / My future perspective and why I deserve the scholarship [7]

@Holt
Dear Holt, thank you so much for your honest feedback..

Please find below, several changes that i've made. Kindly need another feedback on it. Also if there are mistakes on spelling or grammar

Thank you so very muchh..

Back when I was fresh graduate and started my first job, I never thought about what was the company culture, their values, management style or their team dynamic. All that matters to me was how much will my salary be and how prestigious the company was. After few years working, I started questioning, why employees feeling demotivated or why is it so hard to attract and maintain an employee that fit for the job, etc. Several times when I had chance to shared this issues with management, they feel that employees were disengaged and yet demanded for higher salary, asked for comprehensive benefit program and sometimes spread negativity to others. I assumed there must be particular reasons that result in the dissatisfaction between employers and employees. Therefore, this situation motivated me to pursue master degree in work and organizational psychology, to help me building sustainable manpower and promote a quality of work-life balance.

I have noticed that the dynamic within organizations is build not only from company's policy and regulation but also the integrity demonstrated by leaders. In addition, companies need to adapt with work culture (e.g. what drives employees, mentality of employees) that continually change. In the future, I wish I could make a difference and take part in creating positive working environment where communication is transparent and open, creativity and productivity flourish, and each individual perceive their work as a personal journey, so they are empowered to achieve their highest potential. Although creating this state of condition will not be an easy task, I am assured that my learning on work and organizational psychology will prepared me adequately.

This scholarship will help me accomplish my educational goals and introduce me to foreign culture that is probably unfamiliar and challenging but at the same time an opportunity for me to grow as a person. I seize the opportunity, for instance when I decided to take part in faculty's choir that aim to preserved Indonesian traditional song and instruments, I was agreed to become choir's coordinator and work along with dedicated musician and alumni. Working as recruiter has taught me to be patience and perseverance specially when behaving toward targets, hiring managers and candidates. Moreover, I deserve to receive this scholarship because I committed to bring my talent, my enthusiasm and my best effort to be successful, and thus increasing the value of this scholarship.
yass029   
Jan 24, 2017
Scholarship / My future perspective and why I deserve the scholarship [7]

Need an honest feedback on my essay draft below, any help would be much appreciated, Thanks in advance!!

INSTRUCTION
We would like to know your motivation for the VU Fellowship Programme. Why do you think you deserve to receive a VUFP scholarship? (...)

explore the world, meet new people and gain wisdom



During my work experience, I have noticed how the dynamic of human behaviour could shape organization environment and culture. I am lucky to have experienced work environment that supported growth and success, also to encounter situation where there is no mutual respect, trust, and open communication between colleagues. When I look at Google as the best work place in the world according to Great Place to WorkŽ Institute, the organization is not only famous on giving attractive facilities but also encourages employee's autonomy and develops innovation capabilities that constantly nurtured and managed. In my opinion, this kind of approach could sustain trust levels and drive employees to perform better. Therefore, this situation motivated me to pursue master degree in work and organizational psychology and help me achieving my aim to promote a quality of work and life balance.

In the future, I envision a positive working environment where communication is transparent and open, creativity and productivity flourish, and each individual perceive their work as a personal journey, so they are empowered to achieve their highest potential. Although creating this state of condition will not be easy, I am assured that my learning on work and organizational psychology will prepared me adequately. As my beloved late mother always told me "explore the world, meet new people and gain wisdom", I am determined to continue pursuing master degree abroad where I can meet new people from different region, experience foreign culture and at the same time escalate my passion in psychology.

While I am constantly saving since a few years ago, I still cannot afford to pay all the cost for studying abroad. Currently, I still looking for full time job and living with my father - 61 years old man and already retired from his full time job. For this reason, I want to be self sufficient in funding my education. I feel grateful to find scholarship opportunities like this Program that could give me a chance to achieve financial stability and accomplish my educational goals. Correspondingly, my insight based on background and working experience could be an added value in the University. I will bring my talent, my enthusiasm, my positive outlook and give my effort to be successful, and thus increasing the value of this scholarship.
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