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Sep 9, 2009
Undergraduate / "Don't just say it, do it", says my DAD; Person who had a significant influence on me [5]
My new essay- please helped me correct the grammar
Describe a person who has had a significant influence on your life. How has that influence helped to prepare you for your college experience at Florida Southern.
He is 6 foot tall, he has a bulging belly and broad shoulders, he is the man who played a significant role in my life. This man is my father. My father is a humorous man, he entertains our whole family with his hilarious jokes. He's the on who always say "don't just say it, do it"!
To start of my father's a phenomenal chef, he has been a chef for 18 years. people always comment on the delicious food he cooks. Being a chef was not the career my dad wanted to pursue. My father wanted to do something big and exciting! He dreamed of being a pilot, an architecture, also a diver, but because of my dad's lack of studying, he dropped out of school and never finished elementary school.
In fact for this reason, he started in work with my grandparents on the farm. Years after working on the farm he decided he was going to America. My father immigrated to America in year 1991 right after I was born. He wanted to give whole family a better life. Since my father hacked a high school diploma, he was limited to certain jobs. For his first couple years in America he worked as a delivery man, and then become a chef. After 8 years of being a chef, he decided for our whole family to immigrated to America and join him.
After, coming to America, my life completely changed. At the very beginning I was very dependent on my father, but later on when I could understand the lifestyle and the language, I became less dependent on my father. Right when I was turning 15, my father said something I will never forget. He said "Rachel, I want you to see education as a chance, a chance for you to live the future you pictured it to be, other wise you'll end up like me."! "Don't just say what you want, you have to do it"! That's his advice.
Finally, I am proud I have a father that motivates me to do what I want. My father has impacted me and pushed me to get good grades and go to college. Without my father I can't imagine myself having any courage, especially the courage to leave home. Because of my father I am ready; ready for anything that's coming.
My new essay- please helped me correct the grammar
Describe a person who has had a significant influence on your life. How has that influence helped to prepare you for your college experience at Florida Southern.
He is 6 foot tall, he has a bulging belly and broad shoulders, he is the man who played a significant role in my life. This man is my father. My father is a humorous man, he entertains our whole family with his hilarious jokes. He's the on who always say "don't just say it, do it"!
To start of my father's a phenomenal chef, he has been a chef for 18 years. people always comment on the delicious food he cooks. Being a chef was not the career my dad wanted to pursue. My father wanted to do something big and exciting! He dreamed of being a pilot, an architecture, also a diver, but because of my dad's lack of studying, he dropped out of school and never finished elementary school.
In fact for this reason, he started in work with my grandparents on the farm. Years after working on the farm he decided he was going to America. My father immigrated to America in year 1991 right after I was born. He wanted to give whole family a better life. Since my father hacked a high school diploma, he was limited to certain jobs. For his first couple years in America he worked as a delivery man, and then become a chef. After 8 years of being a chef, he decided for our whole family to immigrated to America and join him.
After, coming to America, my life completely changed. At the very beginning I was very dependent on my father, but later on when I could understand the lifestyle and the language, I became less dependent on my father. Right when I was turning 15, my father said something I will never forget. He said "Rachel, I want you to see education as a chance, a chance for you to live the future you pictured it to be, other wise you'll end up like me."! "Don't just say what you want, you have to do it"! That's his advice.
Finally, I am proud I have a father that motivates me to do what I want. My father has impacted me and pushed me to get good grades and go to college. Without my father I can't imagine myself having any courage, especially the courage to leave home. Because of my father I am ready; ready for anything that's coming.
