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Future of students after finishing their study

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The diagrams below ilustrate the destination of UK graduate and postgraduate scholars who did not work full-time after graduating from the university in 2008.

In United Kingdom, the greatest destination both of graduate and postgraduate students after they graduated is studying at higher education, either master's program or doctorate program. While working part-time and employment destination had similar numbers which together ranked middle.

The lowest destination which displayed in the graph is volunteering in work place. It is having similar at figure 1 and 2 that compared in number of scholars. It has small numbers which dramatically stands last. Since, graduate and postgraduate students in UK is not likely to be volunteer, a work without unclear salary, neither high nor low.

To sum up, there is no significant different destination excluding full-time work in UK after graduate and postgraduate students left the university, both of them chose to continue their study than the other destination.

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