Writing Feedback / 4 creteria: Coherence and cohesion, Lexical resource, Grammar, Task respond and comment [2]

For a century, there has been taught in reading, writing and maths. With the given of computer technology, some people think that there would be fourth skill which should be taught as beneficial skill for children as school: computer skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Just decades ago, literacy and numberacy play a vital role in the early stage of teaching for children. Nowadays, under the outbreak of the digital revolution, some people agrue that computer skills become beneficial skill for preschoolers. I completely agree with this view.

There are important reasons why teaching children using the computer are essential. Firstly, being able to learn on a computer has opened up new ways for preschoolers to develop academically, especially those who struggle with a learning disorder. Countless website are created, which offer reading and math interventions for students with specific disabilities. Whereas, it take teachers long hours to find a method to help hard-to-reach children, the computer provides ready-man activities and interactive games to imtermediate use. A good example for this is Window eyes, which allows transfer text, numbers,... on the desktop to braiile using for the blind.

On the other hand, it is a great benefit for children to study about other countries, their people and their culture enviroment, it is instills in them sense of comunication and tolerance. Because of computers and the Internet, our world is closely linked more than it has ever been in another century. Children are not only able to access to multi culture and countries, but they completely talk to friends in beyond the boundary by helpful tools namely: facebook, email, skype... For instance, children can also use computers to communicate with members of their extended family, and in case a move, kids can keep in touch with their old friends.

In conclusion, I would agrue that computer skills become the fourth skill should be taught as beneficial skill for kids in preschool.

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Writing Feedback / Essay about job contribution. I need mentors advice, remark, write score band... [2]

WT_Task 2 20/5/2017
Some people think a job not only provides income but also social life. Others think it is better to develop social life with people you do not work with. Discuss both view and give your opinion?

What are the benefits of having a stable job?

Some people believe that entering a job supplies people with not only enough money for them in order to allocate essential human needs but also social relationships. Although there is some truth to that statement, I tend towards the viewpoint that occupied individuals should socialize with non-colleagues.

On the one hand, staying in profession can support people not only make adequate money to make ends meet but also expand social life in their workplace are undeniable. As a matter fact, having a stable job allows people to solve basic human survival need namely: pay for housing, bills of heath care, moving, educations. Moreover, as a tendency, a great deal of youngsters switch careers to enquire a vacancy with good salary, which assist them having a chane heightenning social living standards. Secondly, in under today's context of globalisation and international intergrationt where diffirent cultures cross, individual can interact with everyone from countries and culture diversity. This gives them uncountable opportunities to be contributing factor influencing built up social relationship with their chiefs and colleagues, which provide gradually them to be comfortable workplaces.

On the other hand, I still belive that developing social life with people who is not co-wokers. To begin with, when they work with their fellows lead to decline producivity, which would result in unsedesirable outcomes, due to they will lack of innovative mentality. Additionally, people can have various chance to acquire numbers of new valuable experiences and skills if they socialize with people who are not their familiar colleagues. As a result, those individuals can possess a golden selling point to enter the rising competitive job market, which enables them to move up the career ladder and earn a more lucrative living.

In brief, entering a job helps people both income and social life. But I always believe that promoting social life with people who work outside office is right choice.

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