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Name: Lam Tuyền
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Lamhaidinh001   
Jun 29, 2017
Writing Feedback / Some people are in favour to live in a house, others see more advantages living in a flat [5]

-In the first paragraph, last lie, i think you should not list the reasons obviously like that because it won't attract the examiners . Instead let's discuss about it in the body.

-I reckon that " well-known" means famous, so there may be a better phrase such as " it is common knowledge that ".
- Third paragrapgh, last line, you should replace " dont have this time..." with " dont have enough time to take care.."
- Generally, I am impressed by your usage of vocabulary, they are diverse and interesting. However there is something lack in your paper, which makes me not very satisfy.

+That's my personal opinion. Hope you achieve great success in your study
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