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SupermanSkivvies

Jul 1, 2017

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 1 - What those kids are doing [4]

@Holt

Hello, Mary Rose. I really do appreciate your comment, it will be very valuable for me . However, now I'm confused about several things.
I've based my report structure on some IELTS Task 1 models that can be found in the web and in books and they don't mention these rules, specially the ones concerning the number of sentences per paragraph. In fact, most of them have between one to three sentences in each paragraph.

I feel that I'm at crossroads, since I don't know which approach I should take when writing my essays.

SupermanSkivvies

Jun 30, 2017

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 1 - What those kids are doing [4]

The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

You should write at least 150 words.

The given graph compares how australian boys and girls aged between five and fourteen years old prefer to spend their free time.

Both genders enjoy similar activities, with all of them mentioning watching TV or videos as one of their favorites. The second most frequently cited activity was playing computer and electronic games, roughly 80% of boys and 60% of girls do that to spend their spare time.

The graph suggests that boys seem to like physical activies more than girls of the same age group. 75% of them ride their bikes for leisure, while 55% of girls act similarly. Skateboarding and rollerboarding were overall less frequently mentioned, with approximately 55% of boys and 25% doing one of these two during their leisure period.

Conversely, recreations related to arts and crafts are more popular among girls. The data shows that around 55% of them do these activies for fun, while only 35% of the boys do the same.

( 158 words )

edit: I've added more information about the essay