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Name: Riti
Joined: Jul 26, 2017
Last Post: Aug 3, 2017
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Riti   
Aug 3, 2017
Writing Feedback / TOEFL essay- Write a letter about your experience in a foreign country [5]

@Aminox
Amin, you seem to have good vocabulary; however, you did not describe much about the cultural difference to your brother.You should consider adding, how life in US is different than your life back in Morocco.What are the differences in food, work, and entertainment styles? Besides, you wrongly wrote " by the bye instead of by the way". You occasionally did some sentence structure and punctuation mistakes:

English and seldom you find someone who knows Arabic. By the way,
Riti   
Jul 31, 2017
Writing Feedback / Childhood experience which leave lifelong Impressions [5]

@okorobiadimma14

Thank you indeed Okoye, for pointing out the errors in my essay. As per your great input, I will work on the weak areas so that I can improve in two weeks before my exam. I will keep posting essays so that I can improve with the help of your precious feedback. Once again, thank you.
Riti   
Jul 31, 2017
Writing Feedback / Childhood experience which leave lifelong Impressions [5]

@Holt
Thank you tons Mary Rose, for your valuable input. I have submitted here, only the draft of my essay, to get a general input.To improve my standardized grammar mistakes, I will start using the Grammarly. Additionally, after your feedback, I realized that I need to create a smooth flow inside a paragraph as well as between the transition of two paragraphs. I will surely start working on these points. I hope I can improve as I have two weeks to go. I will submit another essay after working on my weaknesses. Thank you again.
Riti   
Jul 30, 2017
Writing Feedback / Childhood experience which leave lifelong Impressions [5]

Many childhood experiences leave lifelong impressions on people.Write an essay in which you describe a memorable childhood experience and explain its effect on your life.

Personal essay: Childhood experience which leave lifelong impressions

wonderful experiences



My childhood gave me many interesting memorable experiences.It gives me happiness , when I recall all those activities which I used to do with my father.Although,the most prominent experience, which positively altered my life ,was accidentally waking up early with my father when I was merely twelve years old.

Back in 1990,in one of the hot summer nights,I woke up with the noise of kitchen utensils.Actually, while all other family members were sleeping, as per his usual habit ,my dad was making tea for him at 4:00 am and accidentally he dropped a steel plate on the floor that made me awake.I get out of the bed to see my dad.He offered me the tea.I sat with him and enjoyed the tea ,as well as ,listening his funny jokes.Instead of going back to sleep,I finished my homework which I did not do last night.I really enjoyed spending time with dad and finishing my homework.Hence I requested dad to make tea for me every morning at the same time.

I started coming out of bed early and then I started studying and spending time with my dad.I get immense pleasure out of it.The most deep impact it put on my studying habits.In school,I started showing up

on time.My homework was up-to date everyday.Besides,I started doing some physical fitness exercises and yoga and meditation in my dad's company.This quality time ,spent every morning ,brought truly remarkable changes in my life later on too.

My morning custom of early awakening helped me to become a topper in my college and university.Moreover,I become keen in personal fitness and spreading the awareness to all my friends and they all started taking interest in their physical well being.In the morning tranquility,I loved doing meditation that made me physically and mentally sound.Eventually ,I stood powerful in all ups and downs, that life brought to me.Even on the day of my dad's death,I emotionally supported my family a lot and everybody was surprised that how wisely I was supporting my family members.

I express gratitude for my father who gave me this wonderful experience that turned out to be exceptionally helpful in making me the most successful person of the town.I preached it to others as well.I wish , everyone should learn to wake up early and I bet one's life will change for better.
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