tamdoan409
Aug 6, 2017
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 1: the rate of smoking men declined gradually in Someland [5]
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tamdoan409
Aug 5, 2017
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 1: the rate of smoking men declined gradually in Someland [5]
The line graph compares the rates of smoking among gender in Someland from 1960 to 2000. In general, the rates of smoking of men declined gradually while that of women increased slightly over the period.
In 1960, 600 men in every 1000 was smoking, which is 6 times as much as women. Over the next 10 years, there was a decrease in the males smoking rate from 600 to just 550, followed by a sharp decline in the next 30 years and finished at approximately 250 at the end of the period.
In contrast, the smoking rates of women experienced a moderate fluctuation. From 1960 to 1975, the rate of female smokers rose significantly from 100 to just over 300. After that, the number remained at the same level at 1980 before decreased gradually to just 200 in 2000.
In conclusion, although the female smoker rates increased over the period, it was always at the lower level than that of male smokers.
smoking rate in Someland - men vs women
The line graph compares the rates of smoking among gender in Someland from 1960 to 2000. In general, the rates of smoking of men declined gradually while that of women increased slightly over the period.
In 1960, 600 men in every 1000 was smoking, which is 6 times as much as women. Over the next 10 years, there was a decrease in the males smoking rate from 600 to just 550, followed by a sharp decline in the next 30 years and finished at approximately 250 at the end of the period.
In contrast, the smoking rates of women experienced a moderate fluctuation. From 1960 to 1975, the rate of female smokers rose significantly from 100 to just over 300. After that, the number remained at the same level at 1980 before decreased gradually to just 200 in 2000.
In conclusion, although the female smoker rates increased over the period, it was always at the lower level than that of male smokers.
