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Aug 27, 2017
Undergraduate / Back to my Roots - Common App: background, identity topic [3]
It's a great essay and I loved your third paragraph, but I'd love to read more about what Ethopian culture is like-- anything at all about your festivals, traditions or values, used as an anecdote.
But I understand it is a difficult topic to answer, I tried and gave up.
anyhow, your essay needs proofreading, please go through it once or twice.
... values I have carriedit through my entire life.
No matter the corruptions they saw, hope was never lost. language looks a little awkward
correct some of those grammatical errors and you're good to go!
It's a great essay and I loved your third paragraph, but I'd love to read more about what Ethopian culture is like-- anything at all about your festivals, traditions or values, used as an anecdote.
But I understand it is a difficult topic to answer, I tried and gave up.
anyhow, your essay needs proofreading, please go through it once or twice.
... values I have carried
No matter the corruptions they saw, hope was never lost. language looks a little awkward
correct some of those grammatical errors and you're good to go!