Writing Feedback / Three Yearbook Write-ups (Description of a Person) [4]

Hi! I need to write yearbook write-ups for my friends and I need help critiquing them. It would be nice if you could help me describe my friends. Don't worry, I changed their names to protect privacy.

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Elijah

If there's one word could never describe Elijah, it's 'boring.' He's a fun-filled ball of energy, whether it's looking beautiful during Halloween or a fun night at the dorm. He's an extrovert through and through. While he may be frank with his opinions, he's surprisingly gentle and empathetic. Despite any first impressions, he does care, more than he lets on. His wit is as big as his heart, and considering the number of medals he has won, that's fairly large. Elijah always protects, always trusts, always hopes, and always perseveres.

Sam

Sam is a force to be reckoned with. She single-handedly dragged me into the Homestuck fandom through heavy spoilers and beautiful fanart. She's an excellent best friend, always willing to listen to your problems and be there for you. She's willing to support my crazy endeavors and tell me when I'm not thinking straight. Her watercolor artworks are as charming as her beauty. I know that she will grow into a kind and mature woman. I have full faith and trust in her. I hope our friendship will won't ever end.

Benjamin

Benjamin is a level-headed.leader, filled with determination and fury. His black eyes are consumed with the burning fire of a dragon, pursuing his target relentlessly. He's always willing to share his opinion with you, never backing down from an argument. He's always willing to call out your mistakes and is ready to help others. As an honest and dependable person, you are sure to find a good friend in him.