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Oct 3, 2017
Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 1: Accommodations for holidaymakers [6]
Hi, I think there's run-on sentence in your second paragraph. You need to notice that a sentence shouldn't has more than one verb.
words like but or and can not only act as a conj. but also as a adv. I think the following sentences may be better.
... the highest proportion, and 55% of all travelers chose this option. But, the percentage fell ...
Hi, I think there's run-on sentence in your second paragraph. You need to notice that a sentence shouldn't has more than one verb.
words like but or and can not only act as a conj. but also as a adv. I think the following sentences may be better.
... the highest proportion, and 55% of all travelers chose this option. But, the percentage fell ...
