ziyuzhu12
Oct 15, 2017
Undergraduate / University of Washington Coalition essay: "Tell a story from your life..." [3]
1. Tell a story from your life, describing an experience that either demonstrates your character or helped to shape it.
Here is my unfinished essay. Feel free to give me any feedback, grammar corrections, and content. Thanks!!!
At almost halfway through high school, I started to deeply contemplate about my future, especially about going off to college. I was simply lost at the time; there were no path built in front of me. To make matters worse, I was introverted, judgmental, and feeling trapped in my own comfort zone. It wasn't until my occupational therapist started guiding me through some grueling paperwork application and collecting letters of recommendation that I knew everything started to change for the better. During the summer of my sophomore year, I had the great opportunity to be part of a kind and distinct community that helped shape me who I am today.
The first time I heard about the UW DO-IT Program, I didn't know what it stood to be. My occupational therapist informs me about the program in an enthusiastic tone, and all I said was "Very cool." Except that I didn't recognize how important this opportunity was for me. Summer came around the corner very quickly. The first day to be truly "away" from my parents came and I knew it wouldn't turn out good. It was a hot afternoon. My mom packed up my belongings and we headed out for Seattle. I was feeling all tensed up. Once I arrived in one of the dorm lobbies at the university campus, I was greeted by a lady who was in a wheelchair and who was an amputee. Instantly, I felt I was forming deliberate judgments in my mind, and I quickly questioned my character. Having a physical disability myself, I constantly felt ashamed of my own: I didn't want to have anything to do with my disability and the disability of others. Through my own perspective, I knew that having this mindset was not appropriate: I had to relinquish my way of thinking.
As subsequent days went on at the UW, I got to know more students with the same goals and purpose. I felt a great sense of inclusion: I had great conversations and great time with my friends I bonded with. I began to form a positive mindset that I am just like them; I am no different from my friends with disabilities. It goes without saying that the most influential to me were the staff.
1. Tell a story from your life, describing an experience that either demonstrates your character or helped to shape it.
Here is my unfinished essay. Feel free to give me any feedback, grammar corrections, and content. Thanks!!!
participating in DO-IT Program
At almost halfway through high school, I started to deeply contemplate about my future, especially about going off to college. I was simply lost at the time; there were no path built in front of me. To make matters worse, I was introverted, judgmental, and feeling trapped in my own comfort zone. It wasn't until my occupational therapist started guiding me through some grueling paperwork application and collecting letters of recommendation that I knew everything started to change for the better. During the summer of my sophomore year, I had the great opportunity to be part of a kind and distinct community that helped shape me who I am today.
The first time I heard about the UW DO-IT Program, I didn't know what it stood to be. My occupational therapist informs me about the program in an enthusiastic tone, and all I said was "Very cool." Except that I didn't recognize how important this opportunity was for me. Summer came around the corner very quickly. The first day to be truly "away" from my parents came and I knew it wouldn't turn out good. It was a hot afternoon. My mom packed up my belongings and we headed out for Seattle. I was feeling all tensed up. Once I arrived in one of the dorm lobbies at the university campus, I was greeted by a lady who was in a wheelchair and who was an amputee. Instantly, I felt I was forming deliberate judgments in my mind, and I quickly questioned my character. Having a physical disability myself, I constantly felt ashamed of my own: I didn't want to have anything to do with my disability and the disability of others. Through my own perspective, I knew that having this mindset was not appropriate: I had to relinquish my way of thinking.
As subsequent days went on at the UW, I got to know more students with the same goals and purpose. I felt a great sense of inclusion: I had great conversations and great time with my friends I bonded with. I began to form a positive mindset that I am just like them; I am no different from my friends with disabilities. It goes without saying that the most influential to me were the staff.
