mojomaya
Nov 8, 2017
Undergraduate / "Growing up across the world" - UW second essay [5]
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@MattMag @Holt
Thanks guy, I appreciate the help.
mojomaya
Nov 5, 2017
Undergraduate / "Growing up across the world" - UW second essay [5]
Our families and communities often define us and our individual worlds. Community might refer to your cultural group, extended family, religious group, neighborhood or school, sports team or club, co-workers, etc. Describe the world you come from and how you, as a product of it, might add to the diversity of the University of Washington. 300 words max
Born to a Japanese mother and American father in Kyoto, and having lived in both Japan and the States since an early age, I'm the product of different and, in many ways, almost opposite worlds. After my parents divorced when I was just six, the separation between these worlds became defined not just by two different cultures, but by two very different families. During my childhood, I spent a big amount of time traveling from my mom's house in Washington, to my dad's in marysville, to my grandparents in Florida and Japan. I've lived with three different families with my dad growing up. Not only living with so many families, living with my two very different grandparents gave different varieties in experiences and lifestyles. I had such a different environment: in Florida everything was open and spread out, in Kyoto Japan, everything was tightly packed and organized. My father's family are hard working middle class people that live in the country-side of Florida. My father's side of the family have never gone to college, let alone, some not finished high school. On the other hand, my mom's side of the family are very conventional Japanese; they value education and harmony in the social structure. I've lived on the completely opposite corner of the country and other side of the world. It was quite a difference in living situations from my grandparents in Florida to my grandparents in Japan. From playing with gecko's in dry open fields of the backyard of my grandparents farm in Florida, to looking at Calpis Soda and McDonald's billboards on bright buildings in the bustling streets of Tokyo, these were all a part of my life. For these reasons, I feel like I would add to the already vast diversity of UW. I am not diverse, rather, I am a product of diverse experiences. I plan on bringing my openness and knowledge of culture to the new people I would meet and offer insight on the beautifulness and variety of opportunities in this world.
I just cant figure out how to make vivid details of my experiences that wont make my essay too long or is too irrelevant, Also, if anyone could help with the wording and grammar, that would be great.
This is more than 300 words, but it'll get chiseled down with more editing. If you have any suggestions, it would be greatly appreciated.
I am a product of diverse experiences
Our families and communities often define us and our individual worlds. Community might refer to your cultural group, extended family, religious group, neighborhood or school, sports team or club, co-workers, etc. Describe the world you come from and how you, as a product of it, might add to the diversity of the University of Washington. 300 words max
Born to a Japanese mother and American father in Kyoto, and having lived in both Japan and the States since an early age, I'm the product of different and, in many ways, almost opposite worlds. After my parents divorced when I was just six, the separation between these worlds became defined not just by two different cultures, but by two very different families. During my childhood, I spent a big amount of time traveling from my mom's house in Washington, to my dad's in marysville, to my grandparents in Florida and Japan. I've lived with three different families with my dad growing up. Not only living with so many families, living with my two very different grandparents gave different varieties in experiences and lifestyles. I had such a different environment: in Florida everything was open and spread out, in Kyoto Japan, everything was tightly packed and organized. My father's family are hard working middle class people that live in the country-side of Florida. My father's side of the family have never gone to college, let alone, some not finished high school. On the other hand, my mom's side of the family are very conventional Japanese; they value education and harmony in the social structure. I've lived on the completely opposite corner of the country and other side of the world. It was quite a difference in living situations from my grandparents in Florida to my grandparents in Japan. From playing with gecko's in dry open fields of the backyard of my grandparents farm in Florida, to looking at Calpis Soda and McDonald's billboards on bright buildings in the bustling streets of Tokyo, these were all a part of my life. For these reasons, I feel like I would add to the already vast diversity of UW. I am not diverse, rather, I am a product of diverse experiences. I plan on bringing my openness and knowledge of culture to the new people I would meet and offer insight on the beautifulness and variety of opportunities in this world.
I just cant figure out how to make vivid details of my experiences that wont make my essay too long or is too irrelevant, Also, if anyone could help with the wording and grammar, that would be great.
This is more than 300 words, but it'll get chiseled down with more editing. If you have any suggestions, it would be greatly appreciated.