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Writing Feedback / The number of people in Australia who visited seven the most popular tourist destinations [2]
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Given is a table regarding information on the number of people in Australia who visited seven the most popular tourist destination in 1999 and 2009.
It is noticeable that a dramatic increase can be seen in the number of Australian who chose to travel aboard in the decade. Moreover, among all the seven countries, New Zealand was the most preferred place to visit.
In 1999, it is clear that the majority of Australian chose New Zealand to visit, with 500,700 individuals. The second most popular tourist destination was the UK, totalling at 400,000. However, China was less preferred by Australian, at 86,000.
Similarly, in 2009, the number of Australian who chose New Zealand as tourist destination remained on the top with 1,064,000 individuals, a growth rate of 110 percent. In the meantime, it is clear that China showed a robust growth in the number of tourists from Australia, from merely 86,000 in 1999 to 300,000 in 2009. Last but the least, Fuji gained its popularity among Australians with a growth rate of 198 percent. (174 words)
please kindly revise the essay below from the perspectives of content, grammar and vocabulary.
australian visitors statistics
Given is a table regarding information on the number of people in Australia who visited seven the most popular tourist destination in 1999 and 2009.
It is noticeable that a dramatic increase can be seen in the number of Australian who chose to travel aboard in the decade. Moreover, among all the seven countries, New Zealand was the most preferred place to visit.
In 1999, it is clear that the majority of Australian chose New Zealand to visit, with 500,700 individuals. The second most popular tourist destination was the UK, totalling at 400,000. However, China was less preferred by Australian, at 86,000.
Similarly, in 2009, the number of Australian who chose New Zealand as tourist destination remained on the top with 1,064,000 individuals, a growth rate of 110 percent. In the meantime, it is clear that China showed a robust growth in the number of tourists from Australia, from merely 86,000 in 1999 to 300,000 in 2009. Last but the least, Fuji gained its popularity among Australians with a growth rate of 198 percent. (174 words)
the number for New Zealand in 2009 should be 1,064,000
