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Name: Jordan Markus
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Nov 15, 2017
Undergraduate / "my first job interview" - GT short answer - being outside of the comfort zone [3]

We challenge our students to 'be comfortable being uncomfortable'. Tell us about a time in high school that you felt outside of your comfort zone and the resolution. (max 150 words)

an uncomfortable situation, event



"Hi, my name is Stephanie, and you are Guangze, correct?" The first words rolling out of my manager's tongue. I had never been in an interview before; millions of questions flooded my mind as I began to formulate a response. I replied stutteringly, "Y-yes my name is Guangze, what's yours?" I genuinely wanted this job, and I just humiliated myself in front of the manager. Great. I've always approached every challenge through preparation, illuding it will make me succeed. I had a list of answers for the interview readily lined up in my mind. However, my brain had blanked out two seconds in, leading me into an unfamiliar situation where my normal logical fallacies faded away. I had one option: be myself; and in doing so, I came out with a job and a life changing experience. I've altered my approach and see things now with a hint of optimism.

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Does my response answer the prompt clearly and concisely? Is there anything, grammar wise, that should be corrected?

Thanks.
gzu2018   
Nov 15, 2017
Writing Feedback / I have to write about one-day excursion - report [3]

... taking place in honor of the day of the worker of physical education.

What does "worker of physical education" mean? Is the event in honor of a teacher, a profession, or a national holiday? Try to be more concise in your writing and clarify what you are talking about.

Firstly, all the students tookgot together in the gym. Then ..., we were doingengaged in ... the music for about half an hour. After getting tiredwe got tired... Everyone around us participated in could take part in differentvarious competitions, soand we decided to ...

Your second paragraph has no logical conclusion. What happened after you played tennis? Did everyone leave? Be sure to mention this in your essay.

Overall the essay has a solid definition on what you did, but the phrasing is a bit confusing.
gzu2018   
Nov 12, 2017
Undergraduate / At Georgia Tech, I aspire to engage in Hack GT and captivate my passion for computer science. [4]

@Holt

Is this response better? I have removed the descriptive parts about my personality and instead focused more on the aspects of GTech.

The student life at Georgia Tech focuses primarily on education, which combined with its moderate social setting, makes it my ideal academic environment. The professors are passionate about their subjects and, most notably, I intend to enroll in Professor Roger's class for his CS 1371 lectures. The two organizations that interest me the most in the College of Computing are ESE and Grey Hat because of my curiosity in information security and game design. Georgia Tech's global internship program provides an avenue for me to travel abroad and gain insight into valuable international experiences and global networking opportunities. The alumni association at Georgia Tech is one of the strongest in the country and I plan to utilize it ...
gzu2018   
Nov 12, 2017
Writing Feedback / "Never, never give up" that translated as we should never stop pursuing our goals through hard work [5]

In the first paragraph, you used the term "hard-working" twice in succession. I suggest you reword the phrase to give the introduction more power.
Additionally, you used the words "working hard" three times in the first paragraph. Although it is the main topic of the essay, it shouldn't be repetitive.

The whole essay revolves around "us." Who is us? You and the reader? You and the whole world? Either clarify on that pronoun or get rid of it altogether and reword the essay in a more general frame. ex: "Showing passion and endurance in our journey to reaching our goals identifies us as a hard working person." -> "Passion and endurance generally show's the amplitude of one's determination." Its always better to go general instead of relating with the reader, unless you are specifically trying to emotionally influence the reader. Would you read an essay titled "how global warming affects our planet" or one that is titled "how global warming is detrimental to the planet." Which one is more credible?
gzu2018   
Nov 12, 2017
Undergraduate / At Georgia Tech, I aspire to engage in Hack GT and captivate my passion for computer science. [4]

Georgia Tech undergraduate admissions short answer #1

Hey guys could you look at my short answer and see if anything is wrong with it; Is the grammar correct and is it on topic and concise?

Beyond rankings, location, and athletics, why are you interested in attending Georgia Tech? (max 150 words)

why Georgia Tech question



I do not consider myself as an overly social individual. Most of my time goes into academics but I do try to find a proper balance between working and playing. The student life at Georgia Tech focuses primarily on education, which combined with its moderate social setting, makes it my ideal environment. At Georgia Tech, I aspire to engage in Hack GT, hosting and competing in its competitions, and captivate my passion for computer science. Additionally, I find traveling thrilling because I can enrich myself in diverse cultures. Georgia Tech's global internship program provides an avenue for me to travel abroad and gain insight into valuable international experiences and global networking opportunities. Lastly, Georgia Tech has one of the strongest alumni congregations in the country. I plan to utilize it after I graduate for its networking and career tools.
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