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zw123   
Nov 21, 2009
Undergraduate / "professional chefs" - Rutgers admission essay [4]

This is a refreshing approach and a nice essay to read. You might want to consider answering the "How would you benefit from and contribute to such an environment?" part of the prompt more directly?
zw123   
Nov 21, 2009
Undergraduate / Which essay is stronger? (General Personal Statement) [12]

I like the second essay a lot for its audacity. But you can't be all bad, can you? Perhaps you can consider removing things like "I don't have long term goals" and "I start term papers at six, or nine, or midnight the day before they are due, sometimes finishing the last sentence ten minutes before the bus arrives." You might want to add a paragraph focusing on your positive aspects by writting about your straight forward and earthy character which seems prevalent in the essay? Just my 2 cents worth. =)
zw123   
Oct 3, 2009
Undergraduate / Stanford intellectual vitality essay - Bridge game [2]

Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging.

Floating Bridge is a reinvention of the more popular contract Bridge. Partners are not pre determined but are owners of the card called by the winning bidder and they can choose when to reveal themselves in the game by playing the card the bidder has called for. While purists may scoff at the idea that the game requires lesser skills than Contract Bridge to win, I find this game much more challenging and intellectually engaging as it has sparked an interest in me and has enabled me to learn of how others form decisions. The allure of the game comes from the logical deduction and memory work that the game demands while at the same time the astute the players must possess to mislead their opponents.

Some people may think of it as just a form of entertainment but I see floating bridge not just as a conventional game but as an interesting topic for research. From it, I am able to learn a few valuable lessons in the fine art of risk taking. In a game, I am on a constant prowl of the other players, looking for a twitch in their facial features that betrays a change in emotions which I could leverage on to justify the use of a risky card. Sometimes I am also forced to make tough calls to ignore conventional wisdom and throw out the textbook in an attempt to turnaround a dire situation. In a broader context, I have learnt to make the best out of a given situation and make quick yet prudent decisions based on implicit factors and the behaviours of others through the application of some of these gaming skills in real life.

The idea of bridge as a parallel to everyday life is a captivating thought. In the game and in real life as well, one must strike a delicate balance between one's intellectual to conceive plans and to possess enough emotion intelligence to be able to convince others of their plans and sly deceptions. Also, the game requires people trying to cooperate with strangers in a hastily set up partnership at the start of each new shuffle and to work towards a common goal in that game which is sometimes the situation our daily life throws at us.

A social commentator wrote that bridge was only a seasonal craze which would be gone by next year when it first gained prominence in London near the end of the 19th century. Perhaps the primary inaccuracy of that prediction is that you can rarely use the word "never" when discussing the game. Nothing in the game is fixed; players are thus the sole determinants of the outcome of the game. Just as a bridge game can see the brilliances, boring moves and the bad blunders of its players, our life experience is never defined at either extremes of delight or displeasure. What is most important is to be able to make the best of a situation and maintain a sense of vitality to motivate ourselves with renewed passion and energy to achieve our goals by looking at common everyday things such as the game of bridge in a different light.

Comments are greatly appreciated. Thanks much.
zw123   
Oct 3, 2009
Undergraduate / Anime (My essay to u-m) [15]

I think that the general content of your essay has answered the question well but you may want to consider being more concise in expressing yourself. Also, i think that the paragraphing can be improved.

All the best in your applications!
zw123   
Sep 8, 2009
Undergraduate / University of Michigan diversity essay - holiday in Indonesia [10]

As our flight commenced boarding, I panicked. Where did our tour guide go? Are we really going to miss our flight?

Suddenly it dawn on me that our freelance tour guide might have stolen our tickets. An inquiry with the local ticketing agent who conceded that such cases were common confirmed my suspicion. My family, holidaying in Indonesia, has fallen victim to the anti-Chinese sentiments that were raging amongst discontented Indonesians.

Even though this incident happened in 1997, I can never forget how helpless I was to be discriminated upon. However, this incident also made me realised how humans tend to reject everything they do not understand. Some disillusioned Indonesians rejected the Chinese immigrants as thieves who stole their jobs but had failed to grasp that the Chinese improved their social conditions only through their hard work and diligence. This episode has made me appreciate the need for people to be able to work and improve on their lives in a safe environment where others are tolerant and accepting of cultural and social differences.

In this modern era that has offered the convenience of travel, people of different religion and culture often have to live and work together in close proximity. Consequently, we must be open and willing to accept people who are different from us in their ways of life. As an Asian student, I have a different culture and a different way of thinking. Thus,I hope to be able to add my own unique flavour and help other students assimilate into the melting pot of different cultures in the college.
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