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Jan 12, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 essay - Do parents play a vital role in success in a person's life? [3]
@Holt
Thank you so much for your very informative and motivational feedback.
I would like to summarize your idea in order to improve my future essays and some of my confusing thoughts:
1/ I should not use too long sentences.
2/ The number of sentences in my paragraphs should stay in between 3-5.
3/ The opening statement should show my assessment for the prompt. Did you mean I should write my general thinking for the given topic?
4/ I should write 1 topic per paragraph following your provided structure.
5/ The conclusion should be written as you mentioned.
Does my essay have to include 3 body paragraphs? Is 2 bodies are enough?
How to write an opening sentence when I start a body paragraph? Should I go straight forward to the discussion or show a general idea about that paragraph?
@Samuelsam123
I extremely appreciate your opinion on my writing, which includes:
1/ I should write an equal evaluation on both sides of the topic. I think this will disadvantage my idea as I emphasize them equally. However, I only support one opinion.
2/ I should use more sophisticated words (haha, I know there are a lot of informal words in my essay, e.g. gangsters, but I have no time to think).
3/ I should make more time to plan my writing.
@Holt
Thank you so much for your very informative and motivational feedback.
I would like to summarize your idea in order to improve my future essays and some of my confusing thoughts:
1/ I should not use too long sentences.
2/ The number of sentences in my paragraphs should stay in between 3-5.
3/ The opening statement should show my assessment for the prompt. Did you mean I should write my general thinking for the given topic?
4/ I should write 1 topic per paragraph following your provided structure.
5/ The conclusion should be written as you mentioned.
Does my essay have to include 3 body paragraphs? Is 2 bodies are enough?
How to write an opening sentence when I start a body paragraph? Should I go straight forward to the discussion or show a general idea about that paragraph?
@Samuelsam123
I extremely appreciate your opinion on my writing, which includes:
1/ I should write an equal evaluation on both sides of the topic. I think this will disadvantage my idea as I emphasize them equally. However, I only support one opinion.
2/ I should use more sophisticated words (haha, I know there are a lot of informal words in my essay, e.g. gangsters, but I have no time to think).
3/ I should make more time to plan my writing.