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Jan 31, 2018
Undergraduate / Choose one of the communities to which you belong, describe that community and your place within it [3]
Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. Max 300 words
For an hour and a half each day, a war rages between my body and my mind, my pride and my lassitude. My masochistic need for pain battles the comfort of quitting, angels and demons fighting over the same fundamental question: Why the hell am I here?
The gym where I train and workout is a place where I know who I am. It is a place I can go to escape my problems for a while and release some stress. It's where I have formed some of my closest friendships. It's the place where I have invested years of hard work for many of my personal accomplishments. To some, it may seem odd that a place associated with sweat, blood and physical pain means so much to someone. However, in my eyes, this is my Iron Temple, my second home.
A certain familiarity has developed over time that makes it home. I drive my car into the pot-hole filled parking lot off the highway and park in the same spot I always have, people just seem to know that's my spot. Walking around to the back I open the brown door and enter. Bright industrial lights dangle from the ceiling; pungent sweat invades my nostrils; echoes of agony make me smile.
"C'mon Ewan! Two more reps!"
A bead of sweat trickles down his temple towards his ear as he tries to push the 30-pound barbell over his chest. I hover over him, to "spot" him, slightly holding the bar to make sure that his arms don't buckle under the weight. Three weeks ago, he came to me for advice and the very next day I saw him at the gym, energetic and motivated.
We are a community that helps and motivates each other. We "spot" each other through challenging workouts and build everlasting friendships. Needless to say, I am very proud to be a part of this community.
This is the supplementary essay for UMich. Be as harsh and critical as possible and check if I have answered the prompt. Thanks!
University of Michigan Community Essay
Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. Max 300 words
For an hour and a half each day, a war rages between my body and my mind, my pride and my lassitude. My masochistic need for pain battles the comfort of quitting, angels and demons fighting over the same fundamental question: Why the hell am I here?
The gym where I train and workout is a place where I know who I am. It is a place I can go to escape my problems for a while and release some stress. It's where I have formed some of my closest friendships. It's the place where I have invested years of hard work for many of my personal accomplishments. To some, it may seem odd that a place associated with sweat, blood and physical pain means so much to someone. However, in my eyes, this is my Iron Temple, my second home.
A certain familiarity has developed over time that makes it home. I drive my car into the pot-hole filled parking lot off the highway and park in the same spot I always have, people just seem to know that's my spot. Walking around to the back I open the brown door and enter. Bright industrial lights dangle from the ceiling; pungent sweat invades my nostrils; echoes of agony make me smile.
"C'mon Ewan! Two more reps!"
A bead of sweat trickles down his temple towards his ear as he tries to push the 30-pound barbell over his chest. I hover over him, to "spot" him, slightly holding the bar to make sure that his arms don't buckle under the weight. Three weeks ago, he came to me for advice and the very next day I saw him at the gym, energetic and motivated.
We are a community that helps and motivates each other. We "spot" each other through challenging workouts and build everlasting friendships. Needless to say, I am very proud to be a part of this community.
This is the supplementary essay for UMich. Be as harsh and critical as possible and check if I have answered the prompt. Thanks!
