miriealie
Mar 10, 2018
Scholarship / Lingual & cultural communication is a bridge; Applying for Korean Studies/KGSP-G Personal Statement [2]
Hello.
I would like to give you as good a feedback I can but this is my first time so bear with me.
The overall idea I get from your statement is that you enjoy reading.I don't think we really learn about your education and work experience in regard to KGSP.
You should develop a bit more on that.
I am not trying to be mean by saying this, but the structure of your sentences is a little off. I think I an understand the message you are trying to convey overall, but I also believe that part of the message is lost because of it. I can see that you are trying to use nice "turn of phrases", but the translation is not always quite right. So I would suggest trying to use much simpler sentences, so you can minimize the errors.
In my opinion, the last paragraph was the most interesting, where you talk about your experience in Korea, and what prompts you to want to go back. We can gather that you are very interested in the country and the culture. However as said before, the sentences structure can make it delicate to grasp. Also I think you should talk more about the reason why you want to study in Korea, what would this education system/ this country give you that you might not find in your home country maybe.
You could also say a bot more about your motivation to go to South Korea.
I hope this helps, even if just a little bit.
Don't be discouraged, and good luck with writing your Statement.
Hello.
I would like to give you as good a feedback I can but this is my first time so bear with me.
The overall idea I get from your statement is that you enjoy reading.I don't think we really learn about your education and work experience in regard to KGSP.
You should develop a bit more on that.
I am not trying to be mean by saying this, but the structure of your sentences is a little off. I think I an understand the message you are trying to convey overall, but I also believe that part of the message is lost because of it. I can see that you are trying to use nice "turn of phrases", but the translation is not always quite right. So I would suggest trying to use much simpler sentences, so you can minimize the errors.
In my opinion, the last paragraph was the most interesting, where you talk about your experience in Korea, and what prompts you to want to go back. We can gather that you are very interested in the country and the culture. However as said before, the sentences structure can make it delicate to grasp. Also I think you should talk more about the reason why you want to study in Korea, what would this education system/ this country give you that you might not find in your home country maybe.
You could also say a bot more about your motivation to go to South Korea.
I hope this helps, even if just a little bit.
Don't be discouraged, and good luck with writing your Statement.
