adp2138
Aug 1, 2018
Undergraduate / Columbia Personal Statement - "Why Columbia?" [4]
Hi Arthur,
I went to Columbia undergrad -- best of luck! I think your essay shows that you really get what Columbia is all about.
I agree with the above poster that you should lead with your passion for learning instead of listing the Core Curriculum. That won't catch the attention of the reader. Also, instead of going off topic with travelling, I would elaborate on your interest in diversity by discussing New York. I think Columbia really sees that as what makes it special versus other Ivies.
Change 'Columbia's commitment to research - as shown by its more than 200 research centers -,' to 'Columbia's commitment to research, as shown by its more than 200 research centers,'. I would also diversify your sentence length and structure as well.
Good luck with your application!
Hi Arthur,
I went to Columbia undergrad -- best of luck! I think your essay shows that you really get what Columbia is all about.
I agree with the above poster that you should lead with your passion for learning instead of listing the Core Curriculum. That won't catch the attention of the reader. Also, instead of going off topic with travelling, I would elaborate on your interest in diversity by discussing New York. I think Columbia really sees that as what makes it special versus other Ivies.
Change 'Columbia's commitment to research - as shown by its more than 200 research centers -,' to 'Columbia's commitment to research, as shown by its more than 200 research centers,'. I would also diversify your sentence length and structure as well.
Good luck with your application!
