tieuanhanh
Aug 3, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Information sharing. Should or shouldn't? [2]
Dear all, I'm new to this forum. Thank god, there is a place like this because I am about to take my IELTS exam. I hope to receive your comments on my essay and an expected score.
Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Other believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.
Discuss both views and give your opinions.
The 21th century has seen the drastic change in various fields including science, business and academic. While some people argue that sharing achievements in these fields is a waste of resources and can lead to dangerous results, I still believe that information shared widely and freely should be supported because it is the key to new breaking-through inventions in such areas and improvement of academic performance.
On one hand, it is thought that if confidential and important information falls into the wrong hands, it could result in unexpected and devasting outcomes. For instance, the formula of a new chemical substance which can explode in a large area may be used by a terrorist to make a bomb. Furthermore, many companies keep their inventions totally confidential due to the reason that if it was stolen by their enemy firms, they would perhaps lose the ownership of the invention and, as a consequence, their customers and the money invested into the research and development of this invention.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that sharing information can stretch the boundaries on mathematics, science and a variety of fields. Many scientists use the new knowledge from academic publication to develop their own theories and make inventions. A famous example is Marie Cuire and her husband used research papers from their colleagues to invent radium thanks to which they received a Nobel Prize. It also applies to academic world in which students given opportunities to approach up-to-date information on their majors can increase their interest in studying and achieve more outstanding academic performances. It is possible that researches conducted by those professors and students may be improved in terms of quality.
In conclusion, after considering both positive and negative sides of the issue regarding sharing information widely and freely, I firmly believe that its pros outweigh its cons and information sharing will highly possibly open the door to the new era of science and technology.
Dear all, I'm new to this forum. Thank god, there is a place like this because I am about to take my IELTS exam. I hope to receive your comments on my essay and an expected score.
SHARING INFORMATION
Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Other believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.
Discuss both views and give your opinions.
The 21th century has seen the drastic change in various fields including science, business and academic. While some people argue that sharing achievements in these fields is a waste of resources and can lead to dangerous results, I still believe that information shared widely and freely should be supported because it is the key to new breaking-through inventions in such areas and improvement of academic performance.
On one hand, it is thought that if confidential and important information falls into the wrong hands, it could result in unexpected and devasting outcomes. For instance, the formula of a new chemical substance which can explode in a large area may be used by a terrorist to make a bomb. Furthermore, many companies keep their inventions totally confidential due to the reason that if it was stolen by their enemy firms, they would perhaps lose the ownership of the invention and, as a consequence, their customers and the money invested into the research and development of this invention.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that sharing information can stretch the boundaries on mathematics, science and a variety of fields. Many scientists use the new knowledge from academic publication to develop their own theories and make inventions. A famous example is Marie Cuire and her husband used research papers from their colleagues to invent radium thanks to which they received a Nobel Prize. It also applies to academic world in which students given opportunities to approach up-to-date information on their majors can increase their interest in studying and achieve more outstanding academic performances. It is possible that researches conducted by those professors and students may be improved in terms of quality.
In conclusion, after considering both positive and negative sides of the issue regarding sharing information widely and freely, I firmly believe that its pros outweigh its cons and information sharing will highly possibly open the door to the new era of science and technology.
