Scholarship / Competitive educational system - MY PERSONAL STATEMENT #2 FOR KGSP [5]

please check my statement this is my second essay and i don't have much time left. so any comments & corrections are deeply appreciated.

KGSP personal Statement:

Back in 2013, there was a one week Korean mission outreach program in my community and gave me the chance to be friends with them. We do made exchange of cultures and education system of both parties. This privileged exchange of conversations and ideas made me think of how rich Korean culture does and how strongly competitive educational system they have. These insights extend my own viewpoints and build a drive within me to study in Korea. This drive was solidified concretely when my friend from that program encouraged me to apply for a scholarship in Korea and explore more opportunities in a new environment.

I grew up from a financially-challenged family that pushed me to work early and stretched my bones into hardships. I nailed myself to study hard during high school years. I joined into various clubs such as Junior Association in Business Administration and Student Leadership Development Center, which honed my cognitive more especially my sensibility, adaptability and leadership skills. It is not easy to concurrent study and work but i made it through. I completed my junior high as one of the top students and graduated my senior high as an honor student. The hardships that i went through during that time develop my potential skills and made me as a competent person. Furthermore, i was a member of SKYO (Sitio Kaila Youth Organization) in my community, where i helped to teach my fellow youths to improve their lives from poverty. Involving myself into this bring an essential effect and made realized that it is not the poverty that prohibit a person to afford the good quality of life but it is the inflation force that demotes and debilitates his/her ability. This realization led to open my eyes to have interest in the field of accounting and taxation. In these present times everything changes so quickly, regarding to this are the issues in economy and commodities in the market that are intensively elevating that should be address. In line into this, my chosen field plays a big role in the world of market that sets the people purchasing power and imparting in other aspect of sciences. Studying this field will help me to analyze the existing force on this can be weakened and help to resolve other major problems in real world. This ambition of mine can results a lead to affordable good living of each and every one. I have already acquired the skills in basic fundamentals of accounting, merchandising and product costing, which is a basic foundation on what i persuading of.

South Korea is the best every country on the planet in education way back 2016 and until now be in the World Top 20 Education Poll Ranking. South Korea has a concentrated build strong education system that creates a workforce that will sustain the economic growth. Through this type of presence, i will be mold, sharpen and develop a strong foundation for my future. With this system, i will be transform into a more self-actualized person, competitive and workforce change maker. Abide to be exposed by competent people across the globe which will empower my socialization, professionalism and leadership skills.

I want to be defined by what i can do rather than other what saying about me. I believe KGSP will be my door way through to align those stars and my bridge to build an exchange cultures and ideas more. Connecting this dots maybe hard but i grew up from difficulties which prepared me to whatever trials i will going through, so nothing i can't face with.

Scholarship / I'll be able to make things happen; Motivations with which you apply for the KGSP [3]

Hello i really need your help with my personal statement and i really don't know how to make it, so i dunno if this is worth to pass for. I'm planning to apply KGSP 2019 and i've only 1week remajining. ANY ADVICE IS DEEPLY APPRECIATED.

here are the things that mus be included:

Motivations with which you apply for this program
- Family and Education background

- Significant experiences you have had; risks you have taken and achievements you have made, persons or events that have had a significant influence on you

- Extracurricular activities such as club activities, community service activities or work experiences
- If applicable, describe awards you have received, publications you have made, or skills you have acquired, etc.

MY PERSONAL STATEMENT FOR KGSP 2019

Poverty is the terrain place that I grow up with and the common ground that most of the people here in my country are stepping in. With this environment at the very young age, my mind was early opened in the reality and saw vividly how hard the life is. I early pushed myself to work as a baby sitter to further sustain my needs, especially in school. Engaging into this job early build up my patience on dealing attitudes not only in babies but more to other people. My parents could not give us the basic necessities because there are both elementary undergraduate. Thus, its difficult for them to find a job to provide our basic needs. I drawn from this circumstances that i should do better to ascend my family in the sludge of poverty and learn to be independent for myself so that I wouldn't be my parent's burden. I nailed myself to study very hard and maintain high grades to be an honor student. This is for future because as i believe that education is the key to success. It wasn't easy to concurrent study and work, it was very difficult, but because of this i became firm, determined and brave man. Also, I became an assistant in a gown and dress shop to finance my senior high school study. There I learned to interact with different kinds of people and most importantly develop my sensibility and adaptability to diverse in its environment. These difficulties that I went through were a blessing to come as opportunity door to my great growth. I engaged also into various activities that can enhance my personal development. I joined as a volunteer in SKYO (Sitio Kaila Youth Organization) in my community that promotes the power of the youths wherein we conducted activities for youth to teach them on the path of reality and what they can do to make a change for themselves, family and society, Also, to encourage them avoid from different vices. Involving myself in this organization bring an essential effect and made realized that it's not the poverty that prohibit a person to afford the good quality of life but it's the inflation force that demotes and debilitates their ability and other penury people I've encountered. This realization drawn me to enter the existing force and led to open my eyes to have interest in the field of accounting and taxation. In these present times everything changes so quickly, regarding this are the issues in economy that are intensively elevating that should be address, this made me solidify to choose this course. In line to this, the interest of field that i chose plays a big role in our economy that sets the people purchasing power in the market and imparting in other aspect of sciences. If this force can't be prevented poverty will took it place and this became my motivation. This motivation led me to this; through KGSP I'll able to translate my words into action. Korea is been one of the fastest growing countries in Asia and has the good taxing system and made me believe that Korean government is strong as its people also. Ever since Korea has an exceptional education system and academic programs that are impeccable, with this type of presence I'll be mold and sharpen in my desired field. I believe this program will be my way through to make my ambition do happen and my bridge to be able to build an exchange of cultures and ideas of one another. Connecting this dots maybe hard but i grew up from difficulties so nothing i can't face it and through this KGSP I'll be able to make that things do happen and help to answer the involving concern issues regarding in this field.