Writing Feedback / The reality of Traffic jams in my city [4]

class assignment - the topic about traffic

My city has traffic jams all days. Why does it take place every day? There are some reasons. Firstly, my city's population is increasing so the vehicles also increase. Many vehicles take part in traffic causes traffic jams. Secondly, nowaday, people sometimes walk or cycle. They mainly go by motorbikes or drive cars... They make the road narrower. Thirdly, people often go to work and go home at the same time. It calls 'the rush hours'. For example, in the morning, workers go to work and at this time teachers and students go to school too. Finally, when a traffic jam occurs, nobody wants to be late or slow. They try to go ahead. It makes the road become a chaos although there is a policeman there. In conclusion, I thinks traffic jams are the ugly points in my city. We must get over it quickly .

HERE is my class assignment. I am in grade 9. PLEASE READ AND GIVE COMments TO ME. Thank you!