saco
Sep 22, 2009
Undergraduate / My SCARS and my MISTAKES; Common App [34]
great job, it is a little dark but i think that gives you a writing style
awesomeee
great job, it is a little dark but i think that gives you a writing style
awesomeee
saco
Sep 21, 2009
Undergraduate / "difficult situations to test" - Vires, Artes, Mores, FSU addmission essay [11]
i would also like to add "Knowing others is intelligence; knowing yourself is true wisdom" some where in the conclusion
do you think that applies?
i would also like to add "Knowing others is intelligence; knowing yourself is true wisdom" some where in the conclusion
do you think that applies?
saco
Sep 20, 2009
Undergraduate / "difficult situations to test" - Vires, Artes, Mores, FSU addmission essay [11]
For one to honestly say she is strong, one must encounter difficult situations to test her determination and spirit. The cliché "what doesn't kill you will only make you stronger" comes to life in my circumstance. For one to truly fathom strength, she must also understand vulnerability.
I received a call one day that changed my life; I found out that my mother cheated on my dad. I was hit with a plethora of emotions; a hurricane of hatred, pain, and anguish tore at my heart and stomach. My picturesque family had been shattered. I thought I would never be able to live through this: my dad was left a broken man, my mother's face was filled with remorse, and my little brother was living proof that ignorance is bliss; I was left alone and bewildered. For the next few weeks I carried this burden on my shoulders. I didn't want to confide this horrible family secret in anyone, nor did I want to discuss it with either of my parents.
Then I realized I had to confront this crisis. The only way my family and I could get through this; is if we did it together. My mom and I had a heartfelt conversation and she shared with me her perspective and how hard these past few months had been on her. At that point I realized her hardships, I apprehended her feelings as though they were my own, and I accepted as well as forgave her mistake. I could see how lonesome she had felt, she opened her heart to this man, and for once in a long time someone seemed to understand, to listen. I could see how this genuine friendship could blossom into something else, something more. They were just two souls looking for compassion. When my mother and I talked it was as though our hearts connected, there was no judgment, no repentance, only love. Parts of myself were exposed as well, matters, that weeks earlier I would never have imagined discussing with my mother, were in clear display. When she spoke I felt as though she gave words to the feelings that I could not express. She helped me gain understanding of the world out side of my egotistical views.
aggghhh brain fart after this..im not sure if i should keep elaborating or conclude
For one to honestly say she is strong, one must encounter difficult situations to test her determination and spirit. The cliché "what doesn't kill you will only make you stronger" comes to life in my circumstance. For one to truly fathom strength, she must also understand vulnerability.
I received a call one day that changed my life; I found out that my mother cheated on my dad. I was hit with a plethora of emotions; a hurricane of hatred, pain, and anguish tore at my heart and stomach. My picturesque family had been shattered. I thought I would never be able to live through this: my dad was left a broken man, my mother's face was filled with remorse, and my little brother was living proof that ignorance is bliss; I was left alone and bewildered. For the next few weeks I carried this burden on my shoulders. I didn't want to confide this horrible family secret in anyone, nor did I want to discuss it with either of my parents.
Then I realized I had to confront this crisis. The only way my family and I could get through this; is if we did it together. My mom and I had a heartfelt conversation and she shared with me her perspective and how hard these past few months had been on her. At that point I realized her hardships, I apprehended her feelings as though they were my own, and I accepted as well as forgave her mistake. I could see how lonesome she had felt, she opened her heart to this man, and for once in a long time someone seemed to understand, to listen. I could see how this genuine friendship could blossom into something else, something more. They were just two souls looking for compassion. When my mother and I talked it was as though our hearts connected, there was no judgment, no repentance, only love. Parts of myself were exposed as well, matters, that weeks earlier I would never have imagined discussing with my mother, were in clear display. When she spoke I felt as though she gave words to the feelings that I could not express. She helped me gain understanding of the world out side of my egotistical views.
aggghhh brain fart after this..im not sure if i should keep elaborating or conclude
saco
Sep 20, 2009
Undergraduate / "difficult situations to test" - Vires, Artes, Mores, FSU addmission essay [11]
haha dont take out the first paragraph or dont add another topic?
haha dont take out the first paragraph or dont add another topic?
saco
Sep 20, 2009
Undergraduate / "difficult situations to test" - Vires, Artes, Mores, FSU addmission essay [11]
okay so after i take out the first paragraph should i expand on this idea or add another incidence?
and Elenna do you think i should take out the first paragraphs because i like them?
okay so after i take out the first paragraph should i expand on this idea or add another incidence?
and Elenna do you think i should take out the first paragraphs because i like them?
saco
Sep 20, 2009
Undergraduate / "difficult situations to test" - Vires, Artes, Mores, FSU addmission essay [11]
but then it doesnt relate to the prompt..
but then it doesnt relate to the prompt..
saco
Sep 20, 2009
Undergraduate / "difficult situations to test" - Vires, Artes, Mores, FSU addmission essay [11]
For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.
For one to honestly say she is strong, one must encounter difficult situations to test her determination and spirit. The cliché "what doesn't kill you will only make you stronger" comes to life in my circumstance. For one to truly fathom strength, she must also understand vulnerability.
Two years ago I was the opposite representation of what "Vires" signifies. I was weak, morally loose, and had little understanding of the world out side of my egotistical views. Then I was forced to grow up.
I had a pretty typical childhood with loving parents and a beautiful little brother. My mom and dad gave me everything I ever wanted and more, unfortunately I took them for granted. I received a call one day that changed my life; I found out that my mother cheated on my dad. I was hit with a plethora of emotions; a hurricane of hatred, pain, and anguish tore at my heart and stomach. My picturesque family had been shattered. I thought I would never be able to live through this: my dad was left a broken man, my mothers face was filled with remorse, my little brother was living proof that ignorance is bliss, and I was left alone and bewildered. For the next few weeks I carried this burden on my shoulders, I didn't want to confide in anyone with this horrible family secret nor did I want to discuss it with either of my parents. Then I realized I had to confront this crisis. The only way my family and I could get through this; is if we did it together. My mom and I had an abiding conversation and she shared with me her perspective and how hard these past few months had been on her. At that point I realized her hardships, I apprehended her feelings as though they were my own, and I accepted as well as forgave her mistake.
is what i have so far..im not sure if i should just add some on and say how this had made me strong and then conclude, or if i should talk about another situation that made "vires" a parrt of my life..this is 319 words and i can only use 500
For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.
For one to honestly say she is strong, one must encounter difficult situations to test her determination and spirit. The cliché "what doesn't kill you will only make you stronger" comes to life in my circumstance. For one to truly fathom strength, she must also understand vulnerability.
Two years ago I was the opposite representation of what "Vires" signifies. I was weak, morally loose, and had little understanding of the world out side of my egotistical views. Then I was forced to grow up.
I had a pretty typical childhood with loving parents and a beautiful little brother. My mom and dad gave me everything I ever wanted and more, unfortunately I took them for granted. I received a call one day that changed my life; I found out that my mother cheated on my dad. I was hit with a plethora of emotions; a hurricane of hatred, pain, and anguish tore at my heart and stomach. My picturesque family had been shattered. I thought I would never be able to live through this: my dad was left a broken man, my mothers face was filled with remorse, my little brother was living proof that ignorance is bliss, and I was left alone and bewildered. For the next few weeks I carried this burden on my shoulders, I didn't want to confide in anyone with this horrible family secret nor did I want to discuss it with either of my parents. Then I realized I had to confront this crisis. The only way my family and I could get through this; is if we did it together. My mom and I had an abiding conversation and she shared with me her perspective and how hard these past few months had been on her. At that point I realized her hardships, I apprehended her feelings as though they were my own, and I accepted as well as forgave her mistake.
is what i have so far..im not sure if i should just add some on and say how this had made me strong and then conclude, or if i should talk about another situation that made "vires" a parrt of my life..this is 319 words and i can only use 500