Undergraduate / "the death of my beloved grandmother" - UCF Essay - Bump in the road [4]

This is well-done and is a good choice for the topic.

to never set my standards stumpy and shoot for the stars.

I have never heard this expression. It may really be one from where you are, but the word 'stumpy' here made my brain spin around and interrupted the flow for me. If this is normal where you are, leave it, but if not, change it to something like 'low' or 'average' .

The day came when she was diagnosed with cancer. Tears rolled down my cheeks, and I was in disarray. Countless nights spent at the hospital made it virtually

This should start a new paragraph.

Until the night came, three knocks on my door. My dad stormed in, bawling, and I immediately knew that the time had come. She had passed away.

The first part of this is a fragment. Is there a way you can combine the two parts into one cohesive sentence?

I am one of the auspicious ones to have a loving family by my side

I'm not sure auspicious is the right word here. 'Auspicious' has the sense of 'unique' or 'very special' and so in that sense is ok--however, we do not normally use it for persons, but occasions. Maybe 'lucky' or 'fortunate' would be better.

Writing Feedback / Descriptive Essay A Memorable Place [3]

I agree. I've never been in Vietnam, so your descriptions are helpful in making me feel what it is like there, in a small way.

Grammatically, there are some places that are a little rough. There is a place where you used although and but in the same sentence, and so the sense of the meaning is lost. Although works very well there. In the next clause don't use but .

Also, overdue means late . The word you want is overdo , which means to do too much.

The essay is excellent. If you make these small changes, it will be wonderful