Undergraduate / Big Shoes- Personal Statement [4]

We are applying for the same scholarship haha.

"But I could not rely on my parents as mentors to satiate my curiosity. Unlike my classmates, I had to search independently to reach my goals."

This part was kinda confusing. Im not really sure what you're saying..What are your "goals"? How do you know your classmates didn't "search independently" for theirs? Usually it's good not to stereotype people in your essay.

But other than that I really liked your essay, very heartfelt. =)
Good luck!