Nahin_007
Jan 8, 2019
Writing Feedback / Writing ielts task 1: Developments in the town of Lakeside [3]
General advice: in writing task 1, in para 1, you normally paraphrase the question in you own words. you introduce the reader to the question by just switching up a few words from the question line.
in para 2, you give an overall description of what happened. Here, you say that in both,there were significant changes while some areas remained unchanged.(dont need to specify the changes. these are for para 3 and 4)
in para 3 and/or 4, you find similarities and differences between the 2 maps. writie about similarities in 1 para and differences in 1 para.
or
you can write about what stayed same in 1 para and write about what changed in the next.
a conclusion isnt required if you write the overall paragraph (para 2).
Response to your writing: You referred to the maps as pictures. this may cost you some marks. examiners dont want you to change these wordings. if the question says map, then its safe to call it a map.
Your para 2 was fine, but ill suggest you to start with overall, so that the examiner knows its an overall paragraph.
In para 3 and 4, you divided the changes and what remained same between the 2 paras. you should talk about what got changed in only 1 para and what remained same in another para. its better to not mix them up.
for help with task 1, i highly recommend this youtube channel:
IELTS-up Online lessons. They break down what you need to write really well. It helped me get a 7.5 in writing. Goodluck!
General advice: in writing task 1, in para 1, you normally paraphrase the question in you own words. you introduce the reader to the question by just switching up a few words from the question line.
in para 2, you give an overall description of what happened. Here, you say that in both,there were significant changes while some areas remained unchanged.(dont need to specify the changes. these are for para 3 and 4)
in para 3 and/or 4, you find similarities and differences between the 2 maps. writie about similarities in 1 para and differences in 1 para.
or
you can write about what stayed same in 1 para and write about what changed in the next.
a conclusion isnt required if you write the overall paragraph (para 2).
Response to your writing: You referred to the maps as pictures. this may cost you some marks. examiners dont want you to change these wordings. if the question says map, then its safe to call it a map.
Your para 2 was fine, but ill suggest you to start with overall, so that the examiner knows its an overall paragraph.
In para 3 and 4, you divided the changes and what remained same between the 2 paras. you should talk about what got changed in only 1 para and what remained same in another para. its better to not mix them up.
for help with task 1, i highly recommend this youtube channel:
IELTS-up Online lessons. They break down what you need to write really well. It helped me get a 7.5 in writing. Goodluck!
