Reubenlam
Jan 26, 2019
Undergraduate / Early Christmas - University of Illinois Urbana Champaign Application Essay [3]
"In 300 words or less, describe how your academic interest and/or professional goals will be fulfilled in your intended program of study at Illinois."
Other than proper grammar and punctuation, I wanted to know what you guys think of this essay. Thanks!
"It's not going to hold!" my partner cried, as our instructor stood at the side while I meticulously controlled the RC. As it advanced through the weakest point of the A-frame bridge, the weight of the car caused an unexpected momentum to unsteadily shake the bridge down. It was heartbreaking. I could feel my partner's despair as he resigned a heavy sigh.
As I stepped closer to the bridge, it took me a minute or two to realize the naturally envisioned improvements playing in my head, just as I imagined the factors that contributed to the bridge's fall. It was during this fortunate moment I realized my interest in civil engineering.
After picking maths, physics and art as my extracurricular, weekly meetings with the club fueled me with multiple engineering sources: including Engineering News-Record and Engineering Fundamentals. Through topics such as construction management, safety, and sustainability, I quickly immersed and admired, as it progressively expanded my knowledge and keen enthusiasm in civil engineering.
Christmas came early after my dad finally allowed me to voluntarily work alongside a team of engineers from "Mitrarenov" to build him a coffee roastery. Due to my familiarity with architectural drawing and design, the team wanted me to model a few interior concepts for the roastery, while further broadening my knowledge on project management as they walked me through the process of site preparation, construction management, and various construction methods. With impeccable teamwork, concise planning, and ingenious solutions to unexpected on-site complications, I felt a great desire to contribute and continue this journey on a higher level: The University of Illinois at Urbana-Champaign.
With my knowledge and involvement still at the tip of the iceberg, I am confident that my experience with UIUC's top-rated civil engineering program, along with the student-professor community, will shape me into becoming the engineer I aspire to be.
"In 300 words or less, describe how your academic interest and/or professional goals will be fulfilled in your intended program of study at Illinois."
Other than proper grammar and punctuation, I wanted to know what you guys think of this essay. Thanks!
The shaking bridge
"It's not going to hold!" my partner cried, as our instructor stood at the side while I meticulously controlled the RC. As it advanced through the weakest point of the A-frame bridge, the weight of the car caused an unexpected momentum to unsteadily shake the bridge down. It was heartbreaking. I could feel my partner's despair as he resigned a heavy sigh.
As I stepped closer to the bridge, it took me a minute or two to realize the naturally envisioned improvements playing in my head, just as I imagined the factors that contributed to the bridge's fall. It was during this fortunate moment I realized my interest in civil engineering.
After picking maths, physics and art as my extracurricular, weekly meetings with the club fueled me with multiple engineering sources: including Engineering News-Record and Engineering Fundamentals. Through topics such as construction management, safety, and sustainability, I quickly immersed and admired, as it progressively expanded my knowledge and keen enthusiasm in civil engineering.
Christmas came early after my dad finally allowed me to voluntarily work alongside a team of engineers from "Mitrarenov" to build him a coffee roastery. Due to my familiarity with architectural drawing and design, the team wanted me to model a few interior concepts for the roastery, while further broadening my knowledge on project management as they walked me through the process of site preparation, construction management, and various construction methods. With impeccable teamwork, concise planning, and ingenious solutions to unexpected on-site complications, I felt a great desire to contribute and continue this journey on a higher level: The University of Illinois at Urbana-Champaign.
With my knowledge and involvement still at the tip of the iceberg, I am confident that my experience with UIUC's top-rated civil engineering program, along with the student-professor community, will shape me into becoming the engineer I aspire to be.
