Scholarship / AAS MBA in Entrepreneurship - Why study your chosen subject? [3]

Hey all, I am applying for AAS and I would really appreciate it if anyone can revise my answer below, thank you.

Why did you choose your proposed course and institution?

Firstly, I choose Master of Commerce especially in the innovation and entrepreneurship specialisation because it is my big passion on entrepreneurial practices. I have spent most of my time in our family's small businesses since I was in high school and we have certainly been through many ups and downs managing the businesses. Considering that experience, I decided to pursue bachelor degree in management because it offers the knowledge I need about theoretical fundamentals of business. On top of that, there are quite many underdeveloped industries that need improvement in my hometown, thus running a business needs to be well considered, let alone sustaining that very business. As a result, I feel like learning about management only doesn't seem enough for me.

By choosing University of New South Wales as my primary institution, I believe I will be off to a good start. The 1.5-year program will allow me to broaden my knowledge and to specialise in innovation and entrepreneurship after undergoing few core courses. Besides, UNSW is one of the best business school offering specialisation course such as social enterprise. I have high concern in doing business for social good, driven by the desire to find innovative solutions to systemic social problems and environmental challenges in the region I want to develop.

Secondly, I choose MBA in Entrepreneurship in University of Technology Sydney as second option because course also put more emphasis on practical orientation of a business through application of business entrepreneurship techniques such as apply start-up methods to develop products and services, seek support and funding for ventures, and so on. Moreover, the 1 or 2-year program offered by the institution is also suitable for student like me who has high concern for social venturing, coupled with flexible modular structure that allows to study program in stages while working on my entrepreneurial or innovation project.