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Posts by Chau Nguyen
Name: Nguyen Thi Thanh Huong
Joined: May 19, 2019
Last Post: May 19, 2019
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From: Viet Nam
School: Hue University

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Chau Nguyen   
May 19, 2019
Writing Feedback / The statistics of tourists to Scotland who visited went to the various attractions [4]

Dear Thulai,
Because there is no image attached, after reading your essay, I suppose this graph illustrates the PROPORTION of tourists. That's why i think you should use proportion/percentage/rate instead of NUMBER in INTRODUCTION sentence.

I would like to edit something grammatically in your essay:
- The rates 'Overall, the rate" were... whereas the proportion...
- In 1980, the percentage of tourists chose the Festival was highest, at 30%, while the figures for castle and aquarium were slightly lower, at 23% and 20% respectively
- You should notice when plural nouns are used and how to use sentence to describe percentage.

Best of luck!
Chau Nguyen   
May 19, 2019
Writing Feedback / The line graph of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city [2]

Enquiries received in one city from Jan to Jun 2011



The line graph compares the quantity of requests the Tourist Informations Office in a specific city received in three different ways from January to June 2011.

It is clear that the number of in-person enquiries experienced the most dramatic change during the research period. Additionally, while the quantities of questions received in person and by telephone both rose significantly, there was a remarkable decline in the figure for letter/email.

In January 2011, the number of telephone enquiries was highest, at approximately 900, while the figure for letter/email was slightly lower, at less than 800. Meanwhile, just over 400 requests were received in person. In May, the quantity of questions collected through letter/email rapidly fell and reached the lowest point of nealy 400, whereas the other two figures gradually went up.

In June 2011, the quantity of in-person requests increased sharply to almost 1900 and became the highest figure in the line graph. Similarly, telephone's figure experienced a slow rise to about 1600. At the same time, the number of enquiries delivered through letter/email remained stable at just less than 400.



  • Enquiries received in one city from Jan to Jun 2011
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