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sensen

Jul 4, 2019

Writing Feedback / The urban dwellers tend to live in the nuclear family nowadays [3]

I think you should point out merits of both type of family in first para then drawbacks in the second because ''Moreover... members'' does not relevant yo the previous points

sensen

Jul 1, 2019

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING Task 1: Active participation rates in top ten sports in 1998 and 2005 in Canada [2]

sports participation rates

The chart gives information about the percentage of people taking part in sports in Canada in1998 and 2005.

Overall, paticipation rates in 2005 in comparsion with rates in 1998 was lower in all type of sports except soccer. The most preferable sports were ice hockey and golf.

The proportion of people paticipating in golf dropped from 22% in 1998 to 20%in 2005. Followed by, the percentage of people taking up ice hockey was about 17% in 1998 and 16% in 2005, respectively. In addition, it can be seen that the baseball participation rates decreased dramatically from 17% to 6%. Undergoing the same downward trend, the swimming paticipation rates declined from 13% to about 10%.

The paticipation rates in other types were witnessed the same downward trend but at lower rates. the paticipation rates in cycling, volleyball, downhill skiing were dropped at the same rates around 7% whereas the proportion of people playing tennis felt slightly from 8% to 6%. In contrast, soccer paticipation rates increased marginally from 8% in 1998 to 10% in 2005.

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