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buihieu2705

Jul 19, 2019

Writing Feedback / The graph shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal [5]

In the first line, "which each person emissions" cant be used. You can use "each person emit" ( emission : noun)
Avoid using Next, After that . You can use "over the x following years or " In the next period" instead.
In the next-to last line " It reached....., then DECREASED ( "it" is omitted )
That's my opinion about ur essay. By the way, its still a good essay. Well done!

buihieu2705

Jul 18, 2019

Writing Feedback / Ielts Task 1: The graph illustrates the amount of money spent on research by US government [4]

US government research expenditure

The graph illustrates the amount of money spent on research of us government over the period of 28 years, starting from 1980 .
It is clear that us government expenditure for all researches increased. Also, health was by far the most popular research in this period.
As can be seen from the graph, in 1980, the amount of money poured into health research was approximately 8 billions, more than other researches. In the next 24 years, despite a considerable decrease to about 7 billions in the first 4 years, this figure for health witnessed a dramatical increase to over 20 billions in 2004 before slight decreased to under 20 billions at the end of the period. Meanwhile, the expenditure for energy till remained unchanged in the first 12 years before having a significant increase to just over 5 billions in 2008.

Of other researches, the expenditure for space and other was nearly the same in 1980. over the period of 28 years, these two researches all have fluctuation before ending at nearly 10 billions and 7 billions in 2008 respectively.