kirstenlee
Aug 25, 2019
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 : SPENDING ON CONSUMER GOODS IN FRANCE AND THE UK- BAR CHART [2]
I think that you should not use "opposing to" and use "while" instead in the first line of the third paragraph.
Also, I suggest that you should replace "spent" with other words or paraphase in order not to use "spend" too many times
For example, "... spent on five ..." can be paraphased " ... paid for five different ...
I think that you should not use "opposing to" and use "while" instead in the first line of the third paragraph.
Also, I suggest that you should replace "spent" with other words or paraphase in order not to use "spend" too many times
For example, "... spent on five ..." can be paraphased " ... paid for five different ...