Rotimi
Sep 6, 2019
Scholarship / My ability to surpass limits, gather support and prompt creativity to achieve a common goal [3]
@Moyosola1234
I am also applying for this year 's chevening scholarship.
Your essay really presented good leadership examples.
Although I might not be very good at writing but after going through the essay, I found out somethings which I need to call your attention to.
You need to do a grammar check on the whole essay as there were so many grammatical errors starting from the first paragraph to the last. e.g.
The omission of 's' and the use of your tense in the first and third paragraph. ... demonstrating leadership skills started when ...
Moreover, I demonstrated my ... skills ...
... are part of leadership skills.
... other team members at work by ... persuading them to ...
The use of punctuations is another thing you also need to check for and also the ommission of some important connecting words in your sentences.
Those are my points of view and I really hope they are useful and also explained what I meant well
@Moyosola1234
I am also applying for this year 's chevening scholarship.
Your essay really presented good leadership examples.
Although I might not be very good at writing but after going through the essay, I found out somethings which I need to call your attention to.
You need to do a grammar check on the whole essay as there were so many grammatical errors starting from the first paragraph to the last. e.g.
The omission of 's' and the use of your tense in the first and third paragraph. ... demonstrating leadership skills started when ...
Moreover, I demonstrated my ... skills ...
... are part of leadership skills.
... other team members at work by ... persuading them to ...
The use of punctuations is another thing you also need to check for and also the ommission of some important connecting words in your sentences.
Those are my points of view and I really hope they are useful and also explained what I meant well