Undergraduate / Studying abroad - My personal Statement for Apply GKS [4]

Your reasons for studying in Korea are not convincing. You just said general things everybody says. Don't mention you were looking for other scholarships because it sounds like you just chose kgsp for the incredible financial aid they give. Instead, talk why you choose gks in specific, what will that program allow you, why South korea and not any other country (maybe your major is really develop there), how studying in Korea will help you achieve your future goals. Also, you don't need to say that you can't study abroad bc is expensive, they already know that, that's why youre applying for this scholarship. Consider talking about that and your motivations will be more convincing and not generic.