Khoa Le Minh
Dec 26, 2019
Writing Feedback / IELTS - Task 1 - Physical Activity awareness among different sexes and age people in Australia [4]
Hi Rwannajjar
I appreciate the quality of your writing as a whole, you did an excellent job in terms of providing detailed data in the chart, as well as making comparison where relevant. I want to give some advice mostly on improving the use of prepositions and paraphrasing words in the graph
... except FOR the one from ... women BY5%.
The age group of 65 and above can be paraphrased as the elderly population
... registeredthe A higher percentage ...
The phrase "regular physical activity" can be paraphrased as "regular exercises"
Hi Rwannajjar
I appreciate the quality of your writing as a whole, you did an excellent job in terms of providing detailed data in the chart, as well as making comparison where relevant. I want to give some advice mostly on improving the use of prepositions and paraphrasing words in the graph
... except FOR the one from ... women BY5%.
The age group of 65 and above can be paraphrased as the elderly population
... registered
The phrase "regular physical activity" can be paraphrased as "regular exercises"
