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Apr 8, 2020
Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1 - The percentage of people employed in various sectors in California. [3]
The table illustrates the change in the tendency of working in Business, Government, Health, Manufacturing, Services, Retail and Information Technology in California from 2010 to 2020.
Overall, the only unchanged number is the proportion of people who work in Administration field. Although there is a noticeable upward trend in jobs that related to Health, Services and Information Technology, the remaining sectors witnessed a downward trend.
First of all, the percentage of the employee in Administration is stable unchanged at 13% in the ten-years period. In 2010, Retail/Fast Food was the most attractive industry with 24% of the worker before dropping by 8% (2020). At the same time, Employees who worked in Government, Services and Health accounted for 18%, 17% and 12% of California's workers respectively.
In terms of Health, the number is predicted to nearly double from 12% to 23%, which is the largest proportion in 2020. Besides, the percentage of Manufacturing will drop by half to 4% after ten years.
Writing report basing on the provided table
The table illustrates the change in the tendency of working in Business, Government, Health, Manufacturing, Services, Retail and Information Technology in California from 2010 to 2020.
Overall, the only unchanged number is the proportion of people who work in Administration field. Although there is a noticeable upward trend in jobs that related to Health, Services and Information Technology, the remaining sectors witnessed a downward trend.
First of all, the percentage of the employee in Administration is stable unchanged at 13% in the ten-years period. In 2010, Retail/Fast Food was the most attractive industry with 24% of the worker before dropping by 8% (2020). At the same time, Employees who worked in Government, Services and Health accounted for 18%, 17% and 12% of California's workers respectively.
In terms of Health, the number is predicted to nearly double from 12% to 23%, which is the largest proportion in 2020. Besides, the percentage of Manufacturing will drop by half to 4% after ten years.
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