Writing Feedback / A street market in summer in a hot climate. Write a short descriptive paragraph. [2]

A street market is always a bustling spot during the hot summers. Here people sell fresh produce, flowers, desserts, crafts, clothing, snacks and even accessories. The stalls are randomly sequenced at both sides, leaving a narrow lane now squeezed with people. At the grocery stalls, vegetables and fruits look superbly fresh in their vibrant colours. The tangy aroma of sweet peaches permeates the air, truly refreshing. Almost every accessories stall could be found selling embroidered summer hats and sunglasses which are now bang on trend. All the vendors in the market serve their customer enthusiastically. Their smiles never go weary and they advertise their items with the sweetest approach. As for the customers, they drown the whole market with chatters and endless laughter, sometimes even intensify the chaotic state through the noise of bargain. Parents grip their children tightly in hand, fearing to have them lost among the boundless crowd of men. Vagabonds and beggars settle at the edgemost corner, await for the kind hearted men to be the next donor.The biggest attraction of the street market is nothing more famous than all the street food and delicacies. Those hot and fluffy pancakes dripped in corn maple syrup together with a glass of iced lemonade, muffins in various flavours and decorations, the mustard cony dogs, the classic chocolate ice- cream. They are just perfect summer treats! Such is the street market. Indeed a wonderful sight in this amazing summer.

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