Writing Feedback / Having an organized room will lead you to the success. [4]

Toefl- question 2- writing section:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People who organize their rooms neatly have a higher chance of succeeding. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

My answer:

Many people believe that having a tidy room or office will help you to succeed because you will have a neat place to work or to study, and your brain will do not have a lot of distractions and be confused. I find myself in disagreement with this stance, and I will support my opinion by presenting several acceptable reasons.

The first reason for my disagreement is that people who organize their rooms do not have a higher chance of succeeding because there is no relationship between success and a room organization. To be more precise, many brilliant people are successful in their job, but they have an unorganized office or apartment. For example, Anna Maria is an English Second Language teacher, and she is working with the Voice of America program. She mentioned in her interview that her desk is messy, and it has many papers, objects, and other things. She believes that having an untidy desk gives her more inspiration for her written books and articles, and she can become with new stories by seeing some unrelated objects on it.

The second reason for my disapproval is that the process of organizing a room or an office will waste the time. Imagine that you are living alone in a big apartment. If you like to put everything in its place, you might spend at least one to two hours daily. Also, if you have important papers for your class and you put them away from your insight by using organizer book or on the book shelf, you will completely forget them, like what Americans say'' out of sight, out of mind''. So, you will not remember to prepare or study them.

According to what I listed above, I can conclude that having an organized room or workplace does not mean that you will have a successful life and a brilliant life.

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I am preparing for the Toefl exam and this question from the writing section-independent essay.
Thanks in advance.