Letters / My academic performance - Review my SAP appeal letter & critique [3]

please help me with a review of my letter for a sap appeal. its my first year of college and I did not do as well as i wanted because of the virus. sorry its quite long, i ramble when i'm anxious.

Satisfactory Academic Performance Appeal Letter

To whom it may concern,

I am a first generation college student, and I am the daughter of immigrants who worked very hard to support my endeavors. However, as I am sure you are aware, the COVID-19 pandemic has affected us all, and forced the college to shut down and transition to distance learning. I was not prepared at all for this transition, or even that the situation could happen in the first place. I was overwhelmed and not at all ready to work from home. I am a person who excels in a physical classroom setting, because of my mental health. I was diagnosed with social anxiety disorder and depression in 6th-7th grade, and surrounding myself in a social setting helps me to push my boundaries and improve on those aspects of my mental health. Since the college has shut down, I feel that I regressed into old habits and shut myself in, becoming less motivated to work, which let my grades slip, and fueled a depressive state for me. I've also had a risk of coming in contact with the virus, as my older sister is an essential healthcare worker, and I worry for her safety as well. Along with this, my father has been unemployed since late 2018, due to a car accident resulting in multiple surgeries, and all of the checks from the insurance company have gone to essential things such as rent, bills, and groceries for me and my 3 siblings; he was our family's primary source of income. I have attached one of his most recent doctor's notes, however the reason it is dated earlier is because he had another surgery to correct a previous one related to his accident. I rely heavily on federal funding to help me get through college, all so I can make my parents proud.

I will admit, placing blame on mental health is not enough. I will take the blame on myself, as a person with some time management issues. I have a support system of friends and family who will help me stay on track with this semester's classes. I have also taken one less class than last semester to lighten the load of work, but since I need to stay compliant with the Human Resources Foundation for my family's food stamps and such, I have been putting job applications in to help my father with bills, and to fund my own education when it comes to textbooks, as well as becoming a financially stable adult. I will make time for school and work, ensuring there is a balance that will not cause me to repeat my same mistakes. I have also requested counseling again for my mental health, and established a connection with my advisors so I can ask them any questions I have. I also have contacted the bursar and financial aid offices for help with my situation, in turn getting an extension until the 15th of September to pay for classes, which would be possible with the help of the federal financial aid I may recieve and the small savings I have been able to put away. I very deeply appreciate all the help I get, and I hope that you and your family are well in these unprecedented times.