zolution
Oct 12, 2020
Undergraduate / Why I hate the questions where are you from [7]
Hi, this is an interesting topic and I can definitely see what you are going for and you are so close:
" Visiting New York City for the first time..."
If this is a personal statement for NYU, I would really draw that in here. NYC was the first place you felt a sense of belonging, so how will that impact your future? Why does that make you want to go to school there?
Aside from that, there are only a few grammar and flow issues here and there.
Hi, this is an interesting topic and I can definitely see what you are going for and you are so close:
" Visiting New York City for the first time..."
If this is a personal statement for NYU, I would really draw that in here. NYC was the first place you felt a sense of belonging, so how will that impact your future? Why does that make you want to go to school there?
Aside from that, there are only a few grammar and flow issues here and there.