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sulagnastoic

Oct 16, 2020

Writing Feedback / Using foreign languages - IELTS writing task-2 practice [3]

@tctc8797
Thanks for finding this out. I need to think about clarity! Actually I wanted to give a conclusion and I should not use the word "must" here. I gave a timed exam and ran out in the last paragraph. So, just missed it.

(The ideas you mentioned in your paragraph were enough and mature!I forgot to mention it.
and I found out mistakes, but I did them in case of own as well. It's the nature of human XD)

sulagnastoic

Oct 16, 2020

Writing Feedback / IELTS Essay: Art classes, like painting and drawing, are not as important as other subjects [3]

Point 1: According to the IELTS, you should use paragraphs logically and precisely. You have discussed in 3 paragraphs , but they are not in same size. That can hurt your score. You need to describe every aspect equally with supporting details and examples (Like every mother cares her every child ha ha) ( Coherence and cohesion)

Point 2: I got your opinion unclear. At first, you told "In fact, I think we should keep these art classes". In the end, "should be expelled from high school's compulsory subjects.(Task response)

"----> Dangerous mistake
Point 3: using "won't","don't" is too casual in IELTS Academic writing.
Point 4: Use another linking words( Not nowadays, firstly, secondly, thirdly). These does not include variety.
Point 4: Check your essay grammatically (Actually here I just talked about quality. I did not find accuracy. You should check it out)

And I hope you should read this article.
And ya I cannot estimate your band score ( not so experienced )

sulagnastoic

Oct 16, 2020

Writing Feedback / Using foreign languages - IELTS writing task-2 practice [3]

foreign language knowledge when living abroad

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

One more useless thread title = ban

While dwelling abroad, speaking a foreign language can be challenging for most of people. Some may argue that it is the reason for various social and practical problems. I tend to support this idea by taking account of some specific conditions.

To learn to use a foreign language perfectly is almost impossible, resulting in serious problems while communicating with native speakers in another country. For example, students pursuing their studies abroad need to transfer to a foreign country for a certain period of time. After going there, they, suddenly, cannot mix up with other native people. As a result, they lag in studies, fail to buy necessary commodities, and make themselves isolated from the community. To depict more pragmatic problems related to these, they start to feel alone and bored. For some cases, it leads to more dangerous consequences: financial and mental-health problems.

Furthermore, lacking the skill of using a non-native language can create social distance within distant cultures. For instance, If an individual from another country is reluctant to share his experience, native people will feel intimidated to stay with this kind of person. Consequently, particular disgust can lead to a bad impression of the whole country of that person. Fewer people will opt for living in a foreign country. This can impact the overall relation between two countries.

Considering these options, I partially agree that lacking knowledge of foreign language can cause problems though there are some dominant exceptions. In recent years, for increasing global communication,children are learning foreign languages as a part of their primary education. Almost every country has their specific language requirements that every student or immigrant must follow to enter that country. Having a standard level skill for communication, people can reduce the space of creating misunderstanding.

After considering the skill of communication, I must agree that the people who are not strong enough to use foreign languages can be the reasons for arising serious and practical problems abroad including social communication and national problems.