Ishtiaqurrahman1
Nov 7, 2020
Writing Feedback / [IELTS TASK 2] TAKING PARENTING COURSES DUE TO SEVERAL REASONS [5]
Hey, they essay is well written with no easily apparent grammatical errors, kudos to you for that. I would however like to point out a couple of things that you could take a look at;
1. Using "To begin with" in one sentence and 'Firstly' in the sentence right after makes it seem less polished. Instead of 'Firstly' you could've used 'For instance
2. After using 'Firstly' you should use 'Secondly' in the next item that youre describing.
3. Getting rid off anxiety by building confidence via mock child care sessions have been mentioned twice, once in paragraph 1 and then in 2
Hope this helps
Hey, they essay is well written with no easily apparent grammatical errors, kudos to you for that. I would however like to point out a couple of things that you could take a look at;
1. Using "To begin with" in one sentence and 'Firstly' in the sentence right after makes it seem less polished. Instead of 'Firstly' you could've used 'For instance
2. After using 'Firstly' you should use 'Secondly' in the next item that youre describing.
3. Getting rid off anxiety by building confidence via mock child care sessions have been mentioned twice, once in paragraph 1 and then in 2
Hope this helps
