TrangVo_095
Nov 11, 2020
Writing Feedback / The Internet is known as one of the greatest inventions as it is truly advantageous to human beings [7]
@Holt
I appreciate your comment on my punctuation marks as well as sentence structures. I'll keep that in mind.
About the wrong prompt you pointed out, I just want to say that this is only a part of essay to show how I arrange ideas for advantages of the Internet and that's the reason why not the whole essay to give clear disscusion between the good and the bad sides of it. Also, I know the openinng and the concluding paragraph is a bit ambiguous.
So Can you give your feedback on the coherence and cohesion of my ideas about the advantages?
Thanks
@Holt
I appreciate your comment on my punctuation marks as well as sentence structures. I'll keep that in mind.
About the wrong prompt you pointed out, I just want to say that this is only a part of essay to show how I arrange ideas for advantages of the Internet and that's the reason why not the whole essay to give clear disscusion between the good and the bad sides of it. Also, I know the openinng and the concluding paragraph is a bit ambiguous.
So Can you give your feedback on the coherence and cohesion of my ideas about the advantages?
Thanks